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the first words written

for six days
he toiled
on the seventh
his assistant Peter
took charge
of the key

He said,
"Keep watch
I sleep and call it
sabbath"

the master slept
and Peter gathered
a chorus of angels
inspiring them,
to give thanks
in chamber

they worked their craft
all day, their voices
carving architecture
fit for god,

Elohim

when dawn arose
on Monday,
there for all time
stood the Guf
crafted by the hands
of angels
and filled with souls
by his mercy

and as spirals
of time
coil the earth
the Septuagint
found its first book 

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guf
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Septuagint#Table_of_books


— Seren, Jun 03, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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xena465

xena465

16 years ago

WoW JayCee

I Love the images. Very well written and a good educational religious poem. Xena
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Xena

Thanks for the comment glad you liked it hun love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
M

magics02

16 years ago

Very nice Jayne

I found this one interesting and very nice job you did here. I need to ask you some things I will try to get with you tomorrow or over the weekend. Thanks Love,Mona xoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Mona

glad you liked it just experimenting ... if you need to ask me anything you better catch me today I wont be available much over the weekend love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
loved

loved

16 years ago

LOVEDLY LOVELY

Lovely just ....purely lovedly Very deep thought Thy mind teaches And surfs above normal reaches In the beaches of life Surpass moments of silent joy As many bask simply Like token toys The sight I enjoy
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Loved

glad you enjoyed this one ... hope your doing well love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Did you tell me about it LOL

Did you tell me about it LOL I dont know if you did ... I sometimes get a little busy and forget things Loved ;) love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Loved will paste the comp

Loved will paste the comp link in your blogs will go have a look now lol love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

lovely jc

as usual great descriptive - 'and as spirals of time coil the earth' love judd xxx Ps are you at Lennox Head? - how did you fare the floods? Hope you're well jc - i'm thinking of you ((((hug)))) http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

Just down from lennox the wind was 90 km an hr this morning I was flooded overnight the water went over the road yesterday lol yay NOT was a scary night half the night had no power and it sucked and the weather forecast for tonight isnt much chop either ... if we get much more rain here we will be stuck in here for about four or five days lol getting someone with a boat to bring us supplies lol im feeling a lot better getting ready to go back in on monday morning hopefully for the last time for a long long time while I am under they are taking the implant out WOOOOOOT love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

I especially love religious

I especially love religious poetry for some reason. Well done, and thanks for the links, you saved me a few keystrokes :) Peace and cheers, logic
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Logic

Thanks for the comment I appreciate the time ... I am still learning to write good religious poetry its an art I ahvent quite fine tuned yet ... this ones got another edit left to do but I am going to let it rest and come back to it later love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks :)

("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
Z

ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

hi a lovely faithful write very grand indeed,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Ziggy

thank you so much I am going to do a little work on this one and tighten it up I believe it can be made a lot better will work on it in the next couple of weeks love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
D

Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

beautiful write only crit in

beautiful write only crit in the line that went: ...on Monday, there for all time stood the Guf... should this be Gulf, or some obscure word i'm not aware of. please explain. john x
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear John

the Guf is a jewish story ... I have copied part of it here for you In Jewish mysticism, the Chamber of Guf (or Guph or even Gup) (Hebrew for "body" or "corpse") also called the Otzar (Hebrew for "treasury") is the Hall of Souls, located in the Seventh Heaven. Every human soul is held to emanate from the Guf. The Talmud teaches that the Messiah will not come until the Guf is emptied of all its souls (Yevamot 62a). hope that helped in understanding that word ...and our Lords grace filled the hall of souls (the Guf) smile love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")