Smile...

destiny, this is the second poem of a silent struggle I have read tonight. I must say, yours captured the moment extremely well. I felt the anguish deep inside, hidden from view and disguised in that smile (great title by the way). A slight typo: Endless tears are hidden beneath your pillow, it holds all you agony, with covers over your head. (all YOUR agony). The repetition of 'smile' was so subtle, and almost ironic...I really liked that aspect. You wrote this in second person...I just wonder, since this was based on your own experience, if it would have hit home a little more if written from your viewpoint. A tough subject to write about, but you did good and got the emotion out and let us, the reader, feel somewhat helpless...which was a nice twist. This poem worked for me and I thoroughly enjoyed the write. Thanks for sharing, kindest regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".