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May 16, 2010
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Five star whore's
They introduce themselves with a bitter smile
proclaim there adoration for mile after mile
while working to keep you hid in the dark
dragging out your secrets, setting the mark
Did they bother to read it, or just leave stars?
what did they suggest? did they set the bar?
did they share that commenting is only the tip
or act like they were the only ones doing it?
This is a great big place for one and all
upon the weakest link all the shit will fall
some will tell you what you want to hear
while others will prey upon your inner fear
But to say that the bad is greater than good
proves only that they never really understood
talking shit to people that don’t play the game
will only result in their eventual earned shame
— DawningDaytripper, May 16, 2010
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Critiques
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Julie
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Thanks Seren, Your time and
weirdelf
16 years ago
Spot on.
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Thanks Elf, I hope that I
Beauregard
16 years ago
If I may be so bold,
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
They seem to be oblivious to
weirdelf
16 years ago
irrelevant but funny...
weirdelf
16 years ago
it is not a game, is the art of poetry.
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Okie dokie Annie, Julie
weirdelf
16 years ago
it is not a game, is the art
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Jess is correct, And your
Beauregard
16 years ago
Julie,
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
I thank you for your time
Beauregard
16 years ago
It's my pleasure
hobo
16 years ago
Wow lol
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
From what I have seen Hobo,
loved
16 years ago
you know what to say
Geezer
16 years ago
Your message comes in...
Beauregard
16 years ago
I'm a 4 foot 11 inch
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Very scary Kelsey, very
Geezer
16 years ago
Did you know?...
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Oh its the leader of the
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
For the record, the only
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
I suppose you might just be
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
And not only does she use
Rett
16 years ago
Very good Julie
Beauregard
16 years ago
I'm getting
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Yes you are! And I know,
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Thanks Paw, I know the
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Julie
Arrow
16 years ago
Good grief--
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Seren, Arrow, your both
scribbler
16 years ago
blood on my screen
Beauregard
16 years ago
Just read this again
DawningDaytripper
16 years ago
Thanks,Love ya bunchs
kelsey
15 years 11 months ago
my s mind made up