Music soothes...

I think if you split it into stanza's would be a better format ... seriously one of your best writes ... but I wont comment on content cause its another one I am too close to and well I always read the deeper meanings in your poems ... Each day I wake up with my eyes and skin ablaze I try to sooth with old remedies --- I would loose the them in that line and useless medieval ways one day, ill cut off my hair === loose the all set fire to all my clothes --- the and I’ll paint my body red ripping this silver ring from my nose I’ll let the scavengers spread their wings --- birds and fly in a colony across the night, They’ll frantically circle the earth scouring every contour and every height. I’ll stop and listen patiently to a nearby string quartet as they begin to strike melancholy and offer their songs of sweet regret Each of them savours a dimly lit chord they’ll entertain the menacing clouds with an ill mannered pause. and I will sit cross-legged at a slight remove,strings speak to me until the harmonies conclude. and just like their bows all frayed and some torn I have come undone but will have been reborn. if you dont like the edit ive done huni just ignore it lol ... will ring you guys on the morrow and sort out what nights it suits you guys to have us stay love you and send my love to Robb as well Jayne-Chloe x x x (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!

I would have said the same as big sis, stanzas will make it better. I really liked the somber tone, and the way you strung the ideas all together, Nice work! ~ Gee

Sigh. ~A "Your task is not to seek for love, but merely to seek and find all the barriers within yourself that you have built against it." ~ A Course In Miracles