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hippiepoet69

Apr 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

How Tender my Tough Lady

how tender my tough ladyhow bright to be so shadyso warm to be so coldshy, to be so bold she's got a reputation to upholdso this story cannot be toldit's our little secret to keepshe doesn't let anyone see her weepshe really has a fragile heartshe's tough to keep from falling apart she leans on me, while standing erecttrails of her tears, you can't detectshe stands like a pillar of stonewhen the party is over, we're aloneshe melts in my arms, like a sleepy childshe is just so tame, to be so wild she says, hold me tight, don't ever let goI need you so much, don't you knowI tell her, everything is alrightI comfort her and hold her tightjust hold me close and never let me goI love you so much girl, don't you know copyright 2000 huey horton (hippiepoet69)

— hippiepoet69, Apr 03, 2010

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

almost a song

Dear H., This could almost be a song. It flows so well. I really love it. P. Just hold me close and never let me go I love you so much girl, don't you know I can almost hear it.

H

16 years 2 months ago

Can you sing

I tried converting an old poem to a lyric. But none of my song writter friends were interested in this one. I have two songs. Teara Ago" and "lonely Tonight" they were recorded in Nashville a few years back. But that's as far as it has gone.My friends tell me I'm a poet. Not a songwritter.. I'm open for a cowritter. LOL. Thanks Pamala. Take Care. huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

I wish I could

Dear H., I wish I could sing. I have that in my family, but I wasn't blessed with a voice. I write, and I have some good ideas for songs. I'm always up for a cowrite. The chorus is what this one needs and you already have part of that. P.

H

16 years 2 months ago

I have tried

to make the chorus longer. Needs someone who can look at it fresh. I wish I had been interested in music growing up. My best friend was one of the best guitar players around here. And his cousin was a great keyboard player. I was into drawing, painting and poetry. I can't carry a tune in a basket. I can't even play a record without it skiping. lol Take Care. huey

H

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Annie

The first stanza of this is supposed to be the chorus. But it needs to be more than just edited. It needs to be longer. I don't sing or play anything so I am handycapped at what it needs to make it work as a song. Songwritter friends tell me I use too many rhymes. As a poet, I don't think so. Take Care. Huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

try this

Daer H., I know further in you said you couldn't tell, but i think it will still work. What about something like: Let me tell you about my baby She's so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady Oh,she's so shy to be so bold Yeah, she's so warm to be so cold reaches into your very soul and never ever lets you go What do you think? You can't ever use to many rhymes. something is missing here.?????? Sorry, didn't mean to drive you crazy. What you see is not what you get with her so it's hard to sum up in one line or less. P.

H

16 years 2 months ago

Hi! cowritter

I think you own half of OUR lyric now. That's how it works. We go back and forth now until we are both happy. let me tell you about my baby she's so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady she's so shy to be so bold she's a slippery one but easy to hold or sly instead of slippery. what do you think?

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

Hey

What if you drop the she's on the last line? Yeah, she's so shy to be so bold (8) the yeah gives us the right count but if you a slippery one but easy to hold (9) don't care for it any one syllable word you can work in will do. This piece has 8&9 which are the hardest. Oh, I should warn you I count syllables and no matter how hard I try to free write I'm very pattern orientated (if you read a couple of my poems you'll see, A Picture of Love is one kind of close to what we are trying here). Sometimes that is a good thing and sometimes it's a pain. Feel free to point it out when I'm being a pain. It won't hurt my feelings. Didn't mean to move on without you, but I wondered what you think of: With a reputation to uphold In secret her story must be told (two 9?) Never lets anyone see her weep her true emotions run so deep Oh, she really has a fragile heart tough to keep from falling apart

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16 years 2 months ago

I love the line

her true emotions run so deep I don't do any counting on poems. But you have to on country songs and some other songs. I start off writting without counting to get the word down I want to say. Then I count to see where it stands on the count. Then I work on the hard part. Getting the count right without loosing the flow or it sounding forsced. You are my partner on this song now. So feel free to try anything. I understand the basic of songwritting but that is about it. I will put this all together where I can tell more about it. It is looking good

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K. L. Lagacy

16 years 2 months ago

I really am in love with

I really am in love with this piece. Your talent is astounding. Peace-Love-Blessings ~K.L.L.

H

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Lagacy

WOW! no one has ever gave me a big head like you have. I better enjoy it before someone bust my bubble. I just write with strong emotion like you do. Thanks again and Take care. huey

H

16 years 2 months ago

rewrite 1

Let me tell you about my baby She’s so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady Oh,she’s so shy to be so bold Yeah, she’s so warm to be so cold reaches into your very soul and never ever lets you go she's got a reputation to uphold so this story cannot be told Never lets anyone see her weep her true emotions run so deep she really has a fragile heart she's tough to keep from falling apart she leans on me, while standing erect trails of her tears, you can't detect she stands like a pillar of stone the party over, we're alone she melts in my arms, like a sleepy child she is just so tame, to be so wild she says, hold me tight, don't ever let go I need you so much, don't you know I tell her, everything is alright I comfort her and hold her tight just hold me close and never let me go I love you so much girl, don't you know copyright 4-4-2010 huey horton & Pamala

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

hey there

Dear H., I didn't abandon you. We had Easter Sunday and First Monday and I haven't gotten a chance to really do anything, but i'm on it now. Like what you've done here. Let me go over it and I'll get back with you on some things later on today. P.

H

16 years 2 months ago

Hey

I rushed last night to cut and paste. I need to look at it as a whole. I had company all weekend. So I didn't get to work on it either.It's looking a lot better. And if you want to post it under your name, go ahead. You might get more feed back than under my name. I'm an outlaw on here. LOL. Take Care. huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

hey outlaw

I've been workind with the chorus again. What do you think of this? Let me tell you about my baby she's so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady You just might think she's hard at heart but her velvet touch will tear you apart Something here to the effect: what the world does see is not the woman she shows to me, but I'm having some trouble with the flow and then back into the she's so shy to be so bold. I will post it after we get it together a little better and see what they say.

H

16 years 2 months ago

Sounds good

the new lines sound good to me. and it still keeps the feel. You know a lot more than I do about metering. And if you can't get the chorus to flow into the first verse. The first verse might have to be changed. I have seen enough already to trust you. Go for it. But don't put this song ahead of important stuff. Take Care. huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

he there

Dear H., Sorry about last night, this place is a zoo sometimes. I live on a farm and we have so many animals to take care of that chores take almost two hrs twice a day. Something is in the chickens. Anyway, I didn't get a chance to get back on , but my mind never stops working. I only know to count and what feels right to me. I'm certainly no pro. What do you think about this: Let me tell you about my baby She's so tender my tough lady She shines so bright to be so shady We need something right here that rhymes on the edge with shady like baby and lady. If we can get it right we won't really need those other lines I came up with. You and Tender Lady are my only project going right now. I just recently finished a collection of Fairy Tale Poems for children's picture books, but I haven't done anything with them yet. It might take us a few minutes. but I believe it wiil be great. I really love the whole idea behind this one. I've got morning chores , but I'll be back(me and Arnold ha/ha).

H

16 years 2 months ago

Hi!

I wish I lived on a farm. I miss working at a boarding kennel. I took care of horses there too. I worked there for about 15 years. As he hired more people I mainly only did saddle repair in the tack store.I had to stop working because of COPD. It was getting hard to do saddle work because of my eyesight anyway. I will keep trying to come up with other ryhmes for lady.I looked it up on ryhmer.com. We are very limited on what I call a ryhme. On this site they call it a doudble ryhme for lady. We might have to use a near ryhme. That is very common in songs. Check out ryhmer.com. I used to use ryhmezone.com. But they changed the site. Take Care there on the funny farm. huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

don't fret

Dear H., We raise Tn. Walking Horses, and we have two young studs in the barn right now. They are really a job. Don't fret over it or even try to look it up. Let it simmer a minute, and it will just come. She shines so bright to be so shady Her sweet lovin' drives me crazy crazy will work and most words that rhyme with it, but i don't really feel it fitting in, but keep your ear open for something of the sort. I believe that the rest of the verses will just flow into it if we can work this part out. Don't you? P.

H

16 years 2 months ago

racking my brain

but all I get is echoes. One of my problems writting lyrics is I think in true ryhmes. And there are very few true ryhmes for lady. And very few songs nowdays use only true ryhmes. They don't want songs to sound like poems. I like your new line. We have a lot of good lines. Just a matter of the chorus flowing into the verses. How many times you figure on using the chorus? On paper I had it before each verse. But radio play, they don't like a song over 3 minutes. If you use it on all verses, All the verses have to flow back into the chorus. DANG this is fun

H

16 years 1 month ago

Hi! there

I racked my brain trying to shorten that 10. I think years ago when I tried it. I made all the other lines conform to it.But I don't play or sing. So I don't know how that beat works. I'll be waiting for you. Have fun. LOL huey

H

16 years 2 months ago

Don't know

if this will help. But anytime you want me to paste changes (chorus) Let me tell you about my baby She’s so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady Oh,she’s so shy to be so bold Yeah, she’s so warm to be so cold reaches into your very soul and never ever lets you go she's got a reputation to uphold so this story cannot be told Never lets anyone see her weep her true emotions run so deep she really has a fragile heart she's tough to keep from falling apart (chorus) Let me tell you about my baby She’s so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady Oh,she’s so shy to be so bold Yeah, she’s so warm to be so cold reaches into your very soul and never ever lets you go she leans on me, while standing erect trails of her tears, you can't detect she stands like a pillar of stone the party over, we're alone she melts in my arms, like a sleepy child she is just so tame, to be so wild (chorus) Let me tell you about my baby She’s so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady Oh,she’s so shy to be so bold Yeah, she’s so warm to be so cold reaches into your very soul and never ever lets you go she says, hold me tight, don't ever let go I need you so much, don't you know I tell her, everything is alright I comfort her and hold her tight just hold me close and never let me go I love you so much girl, don't you know copyright 4-4-2010 huey horton & Pamala know.

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

maybe baby

Dear H., What do you think of this: Let me tell you about my baby She's so tender my tough lady She shines so bright to be so shady She's a sure thing and a maybe Oh she's so shy to be so bold yeah, she's so warm to be so cold and she'll reach into your very soul and never ever let you go We probably will have to shorten it in places. This chorus could be to long see I'm not sure about stuff like that. I took guitar lessons once and my grandma played the piano, the organ, and sang in church, but I didn't want to pay attention to that stuff then. I just wanted to get outside. I regret that now. So, I'll just have to learn as we go. You probably know a little more about songs that me. I'm going to call it. It has been a long one. I just had to let you hear that line. I'll catch you tomorrow. P.

H

16 years 2 months ago

Good Mormning

The word maybe is OK. But the way it is sounds forsed. I think six lines in the chorus is about right. We may have to shorten the whole song. There is no written rules that cover all type songs. But there are a lot of unwritten rules. But just about all big hit songs break at least one rule. Otherwise they would be just another cookie cutter song. But don't break too many.But the internet has changed a lot on how we listen and buy music. So we are no longer bond by what the big radio networks want. Some songs that are making it online. That otherwise would never have been heard on the radio. So just have fun and don't worry about fitting the song in somewhere. I want our song to first please us. Take Care. huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

good night

Dear H., I think you are right about maybe. I just wasn't sure . I have went over what you put up. Do you feel like it could work? or does it seem a little long? Would you consider this one to be a country or soft rock? This could effect what we change or don't change. I'm going to review everything again. I feel like I'm missing something. Not the song is missing something, but I'm missing something. I'm sorry I didn't get back with you sooner, but I had to take Mom to the Dr. today. The whole day just got away from me. Sleep well my co-writer, and I'll catch you in the morning. Hopefully with some fresh eyes and ideas. Pam

H

16 years 2 months ago

Life comes First

Family comes first. I have lost my mother, father, two brothers and a sister. And all aunts and uncles except one aunt, So enjoy every minute you have with them. This song comes last. Most of my writting would fall under country. But I like old rock & roll. I'm just a long hair country boy. At least I was. Now I'm a salt & pepper balding country boy. I would like it to be a cross over country and light rock or pop. But as my friend kept telling me. I'm no song writter. I wanted my song "Lonely Tonight" an upbeat party song. My cowritter on it made it a slow country song. It is a good song but it was not what I wanted. We are not as limited on how long the song as we once would have been. The internet changed everything. What do you think the song should be? I'm OK with country, light rock, pop and even new age. New Age? back when I used to post on an AOL poetry site, Young women and girls thought I was thier age. I would tell them my age but they didn't care. I still write like I'm 16. If you can get someone who knows music to take a look at it. I no long see any of the old songwritters I used to know. Our local songwritter guild disbanded years ago. Huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

Dear H., You are so

Dear H., You are so right about family. i've lost my Dad and 3 brothers. Mom is 79 year young(her words). It was just a check up. She is in pretty good shape, but you sure never know. I'm sorry for your loss. I really like the idea of a crossover. I forgot to ask you What did you think of rhyming baby. I know it's line jumping, but it was a thought? I didn't care for maybe either though. Well I'm a poet too. I'm not sure I really know anyone either. We may have to send it to somewhere??? Maybe to Nashville, we may have to do some research, but I don't mind. Do they usually just want one song? If we have a local song writing guild, I certainly don't know about it. I have a couple of ideas I'm working with, and I'll get back with you shortly. I seem to be being a question box, but I want to have all these things in my mind while working. Later. P.

H

16 years 2 months ago

Hi!

I hate to hear you have lost your dad and three brothers. I know it hurts. I only have five sisters and one brother left. LOL I have no problem with baby. It sounds good the way you used it. There are some good books on song writting. I think one is called song writter digest. Then there is song writters market. There is also national song writter guilds. There is also a lot of lyric contest we can inter. But you have to be careful doing that. Some are ripoffs but not all of them are. A lot of guilds have contest. We did. If your brain needs a rest from this song. I got more song ideas. HeHeHe. Take Care. huey

16 years 2 months ago

So good to see Neopoet

So good to see Neopoet working as it should great work to all involved in this poem ... I am a singing teacher/music teacher Hippy its workable as a song ;) love JayCee

H

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you JayCee

This is what I wanted from the begining. Not 5 stars or a pat on my back. But to help and be helped. Pam and I might need help. We are both poets trying to be songwritters. We will have to bring someone else on board before we are through. But as we said in the songwritters guild I used to belong to. "a little bit of something is better than a whole lot of nothing. We have to have someone that can write music. I wanted to let people see this song in progress on this site and maybe inspire more to cowrite. ) have many unfinished songs and poems. And I know I'm not alone. Thanks for checking in on Pam and I. And hopefully we will have a GREAT song someday. Take Care JayCee. huey

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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

Dear H., I’ll post

Dear H., I'll post our write one day this week. It's not that I don't want to or anything. I just don't post as often as I should. I only have a certain amount of time to get on, and I spend it reading more than writing. You're absolutely correct though. We are going to have a great song shortly. What do you thnk about the last verse. I've a bad habit of jumping around. It seem to repeat itself. What about: She says hold me tight don't let me go I need you baby don't you know I tell her it's all gonna be alright and hold her close to me all night I wonder what is the best time for you to be on-line? I would like to set a little schedule with you so that we can work at least one or two days a week on here together. You know how spring is on a farm. it's the busiest time except for harvest time, and I feel like I'm being sporadic with our work. Oh, I also wonder can you draw or sketch?(different project)

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16 years 2 months ago

I can

be online just about any time. I only work around the house. I stay busy as much as I can outside. I love outdoors. One of the words my old co-writter had trouble with was "shady". I know the last verse repeats it self. To me it reflected That I felt like she did. That works as a poem. But maybe not as a song. Every part of the song needs to be gone over many times. There are some lines are keepers. Others that works but I have a little problem with. One is calling my Lady a little shady. LOL although she was. HeHeHe. I knew a girl whose handle on the CB radio was Shady Lady. I tried for years to write a poem with the title "sady Lady". Years later I wrote one called "Shadows of a Lady" it was a compalation of a few women I had known. Then this song evolved out of that. If I have a little problem with "shady" others will. But I like women a little shady. I don't know if I can draw anything any more except flies. I have not tried drawing anything in years. I messed up my hands hauling hay. And I have less than 10% of my eyesight left. But I been thinking about trying to sketch an idea for a poster or t-shirt. It's politacal. I've been hoping to meet some local artist through a blind friend. But I never even met the blind lady in person. But I talk to her on the phone. I have known her sister for years though. She says she has artist friends> she was an artist before she went blind from a gunshot to the head a year ago. She was and still is a shady one. LOL. How do I find these shady ladies. Tell me about your art project. Take Care Pam and have a Great day. huey

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

weekends are busy

daer H., Monday after chores(7pm) I'll be on, and we can go back and forth on some things. I love to be outdoors as well. I don't really have a problem with shady, it's just a little bit difficult to work with. That makes it all the better. I like the idea of calling your lady shady especially if she is. I'm not in any hurry to get done. We have plenty of time.I'm sorry about your eyes and your hands that really sucks. oh, never mind about that project. I haven't gotten a chance to get on all weekend, but I haven't forgotten about you. Have a great evening. P.

H

16 years 1 month ago

I'll be online

I'm in no hurry. It does make me laugh when you say after you do your chores. LOL. I worry more about going bald than going blind. I used to have beautiful hair. I never had good eyes. I'm lucky, I got to drive for more than 20 years. A younger brothe and sister never got to drive. My brother is completely blind now. Both of them are doing good. Take Care and I will talk to you at 7. huey

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear H., I’m glad to

Dear H., I'm glad to amuse you, but they are chores to me. I'm terribly sorry about your hair. I don't know of any way to beat heridity, or I would pass it on. I got on a little early. I have some questions for you to consider. Where do you think we should work? What would you like to change? I guess S couldn't come up with anything for shady either. I 've a couple of notions: Let me tell you about my baby she's so tender my tough lady her kind of love will drive you crazy she shines so bright to be so shady or Let me tell you about my baby she's so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady and her lovin' drives me crazy what do you think? We can work it around till we hit on something that you like and feel fits in. Also, I worked the count on this verse change or no? With a reputation to uphold (9) in secret her story is told (8) Never let's anyone see her weep(9) Her true emotions run so deep (8) and she really has a fragile heart(9) tough to keep from falling apart (8) I listened to the Bellamy Brothers all day hoping to get some fresh ideas from an old source. Well, that and I just like them. Anyway, I look forward to hearing your thoughts on the whole thing. P.

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16 years 1 month ago

Hi!

Momma! I finished my chores. Can I go out and play with pam. LOL I just wrote a poem to warm up. I think we should number all the lines where it will be easy for us to be on the same page, well line.

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16 years 1 month ago

maybe email

maybe we can cute and paste. and send back and forth or just say which line of what verse to change. Or what line of the chorus. . And we both can pick out lines that are keepers and go from there. (chorus) 1 Let me tell you about my baby 2 She’s so tender my tough lady 3 shines so bright to be so shady 4 Oh,she’s so shy to be so bold 5 Yeah, she’s so warm to be so cold 6 reaches into your very soul 7 and never ever lets you go first verse 1 she's got a reputation to uphold 2 so this story cannot be told 3 Never lets anyone see her weep 4 her true emotions run so deep 5 she really has a fragile heart 6 she's tough to keep from falling apart (chorus) 1 Let me tell you about my baby 2 She’s so tender my tough lady 3 shines so bright to be so shady 4 Oh,she’s so shy to be so bold 5 Yeah, she’s so warm to be so cold reaches into your very soul 6 and never ever lets you go 2nd verse 1 she leans on me, while standing erect 2 trails of her tears, you can't detect 3 she stands like a pillar of stone 4 the party over, we're alone 5 she melts in my arms, like a sleepy child 6 she is just so tame, to be so wild (chorus) 1 Let me tell you about my baby 2 She’s so tender my tough lady 3 shines so bright to be so shady 4 Oh,she’s so shy to be so bold 5 Yeah, she’s so warm to be so cold 6 reaches into your very soul 7 and never ever lets you go 3rd verse 1 she says, hold me tight, don't ever let go 2 I need you so much, don't you know 3 I tell her, everything is alright 4 I comfort her and hold her tight 5 just hold me close and never let me go 6 I love you so much girl, don't you know copyright 4-4-2010 huey horton & Pamala

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

good idea

Dear H., I like this idea. I think it will work. You never did say what you thought about the ideas I sent you. I don't really want to change that much I like it very much the way it is. Do you think that is the poet coming out in me? Where do you want to start? P. Ps I didn't mean to get away from you, but I was doing some research. We will have to get somebody to write a tune or melody to our lyrics, then we have to have a demo made. After all that, then we can start to market it. Wow, there is alot to writing songs. We really can't use paramount of Nashville. I wrote some stuff and sent to them once, and they tried to sell me a demo which I didn't know at the time I needed. Anyway, I wrote a thing and sent back to David Robinson the man in charge. I thought it was pretty damn good, but he was not amused. They don't have a very good reputation anyway.

H

16 years 1 month ago

It looks good to me

we need to put it together so we can see it as a whole. Then each read it aloud or try to sing it. to see if it works. My singing stinks but there is no one to hear me. But my dogs. I too am a poet so I love ryhmes. tell me what lines you want to change on the one I just posted. And I will paste it together or you can

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear H., My printer is

Dear H., My printer is off-line and I can't print it out. I don't know about you but I work better long hand. I guess I'm old school when it comes to that. To be honest , i don't really feel like it needs that much changed. I've read over it several times.I'm happy with the flow throughout most of it aren't you? I'm pretty tired and, I'm fixing to call it a day. I'll be back on about the same time wed. I'll keep counting and going over it. Have a wonderful rest of the evening and a lovely day tomorrow. P. ps. I wondered about saint and sinner You never worked those two ideas in about your shady lady

H

16 years 1 month ago

Good Night

this was not about any one saint and sinners. LOL. I know that has already been used in a song. But I do have a poem that covers that just in other words. Take Care and seeyou Wed. huey

H

16 years 1 month ago

See what you think about

See what you think about this. There's a 10 that has to be taken down to a 9. I'm still working on that one. If I remember. I had done this with the verses years ago but lost them. But I never had a chorus I liked. Let me tell you about my baby she’s so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady and her lovin’ drives me crazy With a reputation to uphold (9) in secret her story is told (8) Never let’s anyone see her weep(9) Her true emotions run so deep (8) and she really has a fragile heart(9) tough to keep from falling apart (8) she leans on me, while standing erect (9) trails of her tears, you can’t detect (8) she will stand like a pillar of stone (9) the party over, we’re alone (8) she melts in my arms, like a sleepy child (10) she is so tame, to be so wild (8) she says, hold me, don’t ever let go (9) I need you so much, don’t you know (8) I say, everything is alright (9) I comfort her and hold her tight (8) just hold me and never let me go (9) I love you so much, don’t you know (8) copyright 4-4-2010 huey horton & Pamala

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear H., I’m really

Dear H., I'm really lovin' it, but I still feel like we need to work that last verse a little bit more somehow. I understand what you're trying to show that you feel the same as her right? I don't think that one 10 will throw it off to much do you? I haven't seen a way to make that line conform. Sometimes, they just won't. I'll try to catch you later but if I miss you today I'll be on after chores tomorrow. Sorry again for all the delay. P.

H

16 years 1 month ago

lightning here

it was not forecast but it is raining and some lightning here. So I am going to call it a night. I'll catch you latter. Have a good night and a great tomorrow. huey

H

16 years 1 month ago

and her lovin drives me

and her lovin drives me crazy. I like this line. and I love the line. her true emotion run so deep. I like the other lines too. But they can be replaced if need be

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear H., If you like it

Dear H., If you like it then we will keep it. Crazy is on the edge, but it works with shady. It doesn't really change the basic meaning. We could always stumble on to something else. Will that make the chorus to long? I like the way it flows. P.

H

16 years 1 month ago

sorry it takes me so long

my eyes drive me crazy on here. tomorrow I will go over everything we have wrote. We have a lot of good lines

H

16 years 1 month ago

I like this chorusLet me

I like this chorus Let me tell you about my baby she’s so tender my tough lady shines so bright to be so shady and her lovin’ drives me crazy

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear H., Thanks for

Dear H., Thanks for your patience. I didn't mean to hold up progress. I 've been trying since Monday to get caught back up. I'll get there one of these days, but I usually do better than I've done with you. Shit happens though. O.K. I love the chorus you picked. Do we need two more lines? I also thought what you worked up with the verses sounded great to me. I'm going to go back over everything we have done so far. I feel like I need to reconnect with where we were. P.

H

16 years 1 month ago

at first I wasn’t keen on

at first I wasn't keen on the line. in secret her story is told. But after reading it a few times with a clear mind. I like it With a reputation to uphold (9) in secret her story is told (8) Never let’s anyone see her weep(9) Her true emotions run so deep (8) and she really has a fragile heart(9) tough to keep from falling apart (8) I listened to the Bellamy Brothers

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Sorry about last night

Dear H., I'm very sorry about last night. My pastures wife died yesterday. They are wonderful people, and I've been a member of that church since I was nine. One of their sons is my husbands best friend since they were in the crib. It was late when I got in and I figured you'd already given up on me. It'll probably be monday before I can get anything accomplished. I read over what you did and I really love it. I think we are well on our way. I'll be in touch. P.

H

16 years 1 month ago

First thing first

and that is family and old friends and your job. I hate to hear about your friend. Take Care and be there for her family. huey

H

16 years 1 month ago

Hello

I hope things are going well as they can under the curcumstance. I know your paster has a lot of support. But I know it is still hard on everyone. There is no rush here. Just take Care and talk to you later. huey

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear H., If you would

Dear H., If you would rather, we can work it a different way. I've reread most everything we've done. I want to do that a bit more and play with it first before we work anymore. I think we've pretty much settled on the chorus give or take a line. I don't know for sure but I don't think one ten will throw the whole thing off. We'll have to see what a singer or song writer says. I'll be in touch again i'm sorry for the delays. I really enjoy working like this and I'll get my act together I promise. I'll be back tomorrow, i'm going to work on this awhile before bed tonight. P.

H

16 years 1 month ago

sounds good to me

I think we pretty much have it as far as we can take it. Just a little touch up. Then see how it sings. I need to try and get in touch with the man in Nashville that did my demos. And see if he knows anyone that might be interested. Take Care and have a good night. huey

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

hey there

Dear H., I posted our song today. I made a couple of small changes that I don't think you will mind, but if you do we will change them back. On the last verse I switched the last two lines, and it seemed to help the flow, and On our ten I think I might have worked it into a nine. Let me know what you think. I was able to get a bit of work done last night. I have a song that I wrote called Country Style that I think needs male influence. If you would be interested in working it . We might put together a package of at least three songs to try and sell especially if we have to put up money for demos and what not. I remember you said that you had other pieces that we could probably work. If you think it would be o.k let me know. I'm not really sure what our next move is, but I'm enjoying the learning experience. I'll try to get back on later. If it's better for you in the daytime let me know. Sometimes, I can get a break after dinner. P.

H

16 years 1 month ago

Hey hey

I'm going to find your post after I post this. Yes I would love to have a few songs to demo. But they get expensive fast. I had two done years ago. I got them done cheap at a thousand for two songs. I still have his info. We can enter it in some lyric contest and see if it draws any interest

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear S., If you don’t

Dear S., If you don't mind me taking advantage of your expertise on this. The chorus on this one is a little tough: P.

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shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Just stunning

So i just wanted to cry, what a fabulous poem, you should write more poems put your thoughts out a bit so we can read them! shirley harrison

H

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Shirley

Pamala and I cowrote this one. I have been writting poems sence I was about 16. Most of them have been lost. I just found the lady that inspired most of my older stuff on myspace last night. I last seen her in 1983. She might tell me to go #@!!, after all. I left her for another woman. LONG STORY. Take Care. huey