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Lonnie
Feb 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

It Floats In Spotlight (an apt acrostic)

Idolized by one and all
Teasingly discrete

Flagrant with simplicity
Lucidly complete
Overwhelming other verse
As it surely must
Trampling poetic egos
Soundly in the dust

Is poet popularity
Never cause for blame?

Sacrificing excellence
Purposely for Name?
Or is it mere coincidence
That certain poems are fed
Leaving others bleeding
In Lonely Lists 'til dead?
Guilt is quite gratuitous
Honesty condemned
Thus a poem comes to an end

C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Feb 26, 2010

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Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Acrostics are a new thing

Acrostics are a new thing for me Lonnie, diverging from the topic, i thought some of the lines were very good language wise. i like the use of rhymeing as well and thought the rhythem was supurb. vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you very much!

This was my first attempt at an Acrostic and it proved to be a very challenging form to work with, but still fun! Thanks for the nice comments!
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

just one

just one correction: L12:"Sacificing excellence" -would that be "sacrificing"? ..overall, love the read..and its something to ponder about.. :)
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks, Alone!

I appreciate the heads up on the typo! Sorry I didn't catch it myself! I also greatly appreciate you stopping by to read and leave a comment!
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Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Well done

the "limitations" of using the acrostic form did not prevent you from getting your message "across". very satisfying reading, the end fit in perfectly.
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you, Mariposa!

Good, (or bad), feedback is always welcome! I'm very glad you enjoyed this for what it was and didn't read anything (extra) into it! Thanks again!
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Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

On rhythm

The rhythm flowed very well and the theme of being in the spotlight was very appropriate for this site! It's true, when others are in the spotlight in any situation, we tend to feel our "poetic egis trampling soundly into dust" and worry that we will be in "Lonely Lists 'til dead" (Is there a reason you capitolized "Lonely Lists"?)
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Once again, my thanks!

Rhyme and meter are always very important to me, even though many feel that they are outdated and 'Amateurish'!
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Being in the spotlight feels

Being in the spotlight feels good and it's true there are many lovely poems that deserve the spotlight, but don't make it. I don't know how they work it out or how they decide; or who nominates, or who deserves it? Rosina xena465
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Lonnie

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks, Rosina!

I just sort of felt compelled to write this one for several reasons! I'm glad you liked it!
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Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Last comment!

I meant to say "trampling poetic egos" (there is nothing worse than to be misquoted- next time I'm going to preview better) there would be a completely different feel if it were read the way I wrote it
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Great work Lon !

So much thought going to the spot. On the Lonesome tis true, some the most difficult to do, thoughts can wash out leaving all so blue. Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."