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rolling in green fields

I was reposed on green velvet
when a notion struck,
so, I took out my tweezers
and set to task

painstakingly I separated
minute fibers of spirit,
away from itself

after examining each shimmer
as it waxed and waned,
a lifeline of ego and id
refracted from Father

I fell into conundrum
what had I done ??

it was only when
daffodils bloomed
and the blue heron arrived
that my tweezers
breached a void

I was astonished to find
a vast empty cavern,
and without its whole
the inner was,
nonexistent

I begin a new endeavor
of reconnection
for, what was once

a spirit for life

throwing a dustcover
on the typewriter,
and sheathing my pen
I have but Milli seconds
left on this page

I detect the scent of lilies
mixed with myrrh,
I follow,
and in my wake
a white dingo steps light
as riding his back the claws
of a blue heron relax,
into the syncopation of journey

at each step the strips
of separation,
refashion a new age

on the horizon Esperanza
swirls veils of green velvet

and in the peripheral
La Mort's shadow
curls, ever closer

— Seren, Feb 24, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

What a visual

This waa a beautiful visual poem I had in my head as I read it. Very methodically written and loved it very much as always you have a beautiful way with words aussie lady love magics02 xoxoxo "Determination Brings Success"
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mona

I will tweak this one when I come back thanks for the kind comment much appreciated kind regards love Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

Always a pleasure to get a visit from you dear lady ... this is my last for a while you take care much love Jayne-Chloe x x x
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Your imagination never

Your imagination never ceases to amaze me. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Rosina

Well the imagaination is going to have a holiday of sorts see you all when I get back :) off to hospital today love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
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pamela

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Seren,It was

Dear Seren, It was beautifully done. I really enjoy reading your work. Thanks P
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Pamela

So glad you enjoyed this one its not quite done but its about as close as I am going to get it for the time being you kind comment is much appreciated love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ephraim

I did not know that was what tweezers meant in nigeria !~! I reread my poem with giraffe's in my mind and it gave me a picture of them examining the leaves of trees as they plucked them off lol ... wonderful information kind regards love Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ephraim

I am going to enjoy you being around ... I am a hunter of obscure information and you seem to be a font lol lovely to see you visit again and thank you love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Is there a traditional tale

That tells of the white wolf and the Heron upon its back? Brings to mind the Mongolian story of the four beasts stacked on top of one another. I feel I am missing something here Jayne in the telling ...possibley tired so will return with fresh eyes and an awake brain. Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Seahbac

Thre might be but I dont know it (the traditional tale) but if you find it I would love to read it ... I am going to be away for a little bit so take your time coming back to this one you got heapssss of time lol hugs Jayne-Chloe
VX

Venus x

16 years 3 months ago

I Love This, Jayne-Chloe

Venus I Love This, Jayne-Chloe!! It flows so eloquently. It reminds me of a death and rebirth of a spiritual self. Beautiful my friend, Bravo!! Love and Hugs, Venus xxxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Venus

Thanks for your visit ... I am so glad you liked this one and found it peaceful ... will be round and visit you in the next few days when time permits ... thank you again for your visit anf kind comment love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Awwww Alone whenever I am

Awwww Alone whenever I am speechless its usually a sign of a good write ... I appreciate your comment and your visit love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Green fields...

are there to lie in. Stay for just awhile Hope for me, to see Soon again... your smile Your pen is still beside you Themes run through your mind Because this is, what you do Awesome are your kind Love and hugz, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Gee

I have written a little lol ok a lot ... and I am working on a massive four page poem but it wont be ready for at least another four weeks lol .... thank you for the beautiful verse ... I am only here for a brief few minutes but wanted to thank you for your messages of support it is much appreciated ... lvoe you my New Yawker love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Can't wait....

To see what you are fired up about. Love the new pic. Four pages? Four weeks? Holy S...! You are amazing, I don't think I could ever do that! I couldn't make myself focus that long on anything. 'Course if I could think of something that held my interest for that long, I might try it. Well, I will keep it short, I am glad that you liked my little verse, and I will strive to keep you laughing and entertained. Love and higgest bugs of all, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest GeeI am so glad I

Dearest Gee I am so glad I got to see you before I go back in a few hours ... that poem was written a little while ago and then Brian said something and it all clicked I needed to sit back deconstruct the poem from scratch but I believe its one of my best not finished but not far from it when its done, I am sure when the time comes you will write one that will surprise you ... this one came from nowhere I was worried it was never going to stop lol but who am I to tell my muse lol the bitch still dont listen to MOI lol (hugs) good too see you I have missed my Neotime the last few days ... keep the poems coming I am reading on my phone and my laptops being brought up every day or every other day ... love you New yawker Love and higgliest bugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Stu

Will be back round in the next couple of days and I will be reading and commenting so will have a look out for anything new that you have for me take care and you keep writing love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
yenti

yenti

16 years 3 months ago

Jayne

A beautiful piece that has portrayed a closness to the spirit world and an ifinity with the most beutiful place where all things are but a thought then a spirit reality, Sadie sends her Jello love and us here also, keep those lovely words coming, Yours Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ian

Dont know if I will get time to do emails this afternoon I am only here for a little bit and thought I would get these answered so people didnt think me rude lol ... thank you for your beautiful words ... I have written something i am very excited about and I think its one you and Sadie will enjoy ;) Love and biggest hugs to you both Jayne-Chloe x x x