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thistledown



thistledown


sitting across from you,

i watch the muscle in your jaw work 


   you chew quickly

in an effort to have done

with eating

 

always in a hurry,

always needing

to get to the next course,
   
   the next chore


         
   i want to watch you

be naked,

free from the constraints

of your everyday skin

 

untethered from obligations

      timetables

            expectations



    i would catch your kisses

   as you floated on the updraft of chance

 

— pleiades, Feb 21, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear P

A wise lady said to me I love watching your expansion ... well I am loving yours this is one of your best in my opinion ... love it and I find nothing to fault love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
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pleiades

16 years 3 months ago

why thanks jc! i like this

why thanks jc! i like this one too... not totally happy with it, but i'm going to leave it. a poet friend once said to me, sometimes it is what it is...that's the case here. i'm going through a process of trying to pare back a write...write just the bones. orgami has been a great influence to me on that score...his writes are so potent, and he never wastes a word, nor resorts to florid descriptors. thanks again....your words are very much appreciated p.
Esker

Esker

16 years 3 months ago

looking

when are we spirits when are we light take away our cell phone blackberry worry does one stop and free the fee of life is there not rapture for being for letting in the light its been forever or maybe just now that I may say the intimacy of this could be close its just attention that fills the wounds of hearts and in multitask days of Now we give what we think is great and yet our ache tells us there is need for so much more warmth I push everything away and yet I see that all Im seeing is backlit sensation there is so much more and maybe Im too late to say that to one
Esker

Esker

16 years 2 months ago

Meals

(thought my stars were given before..anyway here now!!) I remember meal times in afternoon they could be storms or calm placid humble turnabouts silent seething Van Goghs The Potato Eaters Apacolypse Now French Family scene cut from the movie The Big Chill remember family violent disruptions overheard in talk to talk nothing is certian sometimes how many intimacies are we invited in to share meals yet we can do this everyday at resturants but its not home not the personal space not the core the root Supper we called it our house catching the last of the sun large conifer and decidious trees across the old blue crushed limestone highway a couple of century homes from the village on the hills forever shall I hear the potato pot lid clinging and clanging as the water boiled the house with its smells its moods its depths this poem makes me stop and focus in a look in retro I re read this Thank you Esker~ [ core\experience/output ] in travelling light keeping few posessions filling in the spot of philosophical sofa king man about town make do man My own intimacy with past to present a jump from island to island light and the thunder far distant personal I feel but keep description only writing symptoms here but thank You again for this.. ~