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Feb 08, 2010
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Awakening
The whisper came at midnight
from lips that should not speak
it caused my heart to flutter
and made my knees grow weak
The pallor of her countenance
revealed that she was dead
how then could she form the words
that rang within my head?
Standing by the bedside
I stretched a trembling hand
seeking to discern some truth
my brain could understand
Her limbs were stiff with rigor
her bosom did not rise
circles dark and sinister
surrounded both her eyes
But then those eyes popped open
those limbs began to flail
and from the very depths of hell
my love began to wail
She leaped up from her death-bed
and struck me to the floor
my ears heard one last scream of rage
and then they heard no more
C. Lon R. Bruso
from lips that should not speak
it caused my heart to flutter
and made my knees grow weak
The pallor of her countenance
revealed that she was dead
how then could she form the words
that rang within my head?
Standing by the bedside
I stretched a trembling hand
seeking to discern some truth
my brain could understand
Her limbs were stiff with rigor
her bosom did not rise
circles dark and sinister
surrounded both her eyes
But then those eyes popped open
those limbs began to flail
and from the very depths of hell
my love began to wail
She leaped up from her death-bed
and struck me to the floor
my ears heard one last scream of rage
and then they heard no more
C. Lon R. Bruso
— Lonnie, Feb 08, 2010
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Critiques
Lonnie
16 years 3 months ago
Thanks, Indi
Kailashana
16 years 3 months ago
((((((Lonnie)))))) should I
Lonnie
16 years 3 months ago
No worries, Anna!
yenti
16 years 3 months ago
Lonnie
Lonnie
16 years 3 months ago
Thank you, Ian!
poewriter58
16 years 3 months ago
Bear
Kailashana
16 years 3 months ago
And if one does…one will
Lonnie
16 years 3 months ago
Thanks, M'Dear!
xena465
16 years 3 months ago
I like it very much...
Lonnie
16 years 3 months ago
Thanks, Rosina!
xena465
16 years 3 months ago
Not a new fan...
xena465
16 years 3 months ago
Happy Valentines
Seren
16 years 3 months ago
Dear Lonnie
Lonnie
16 years 3 months ago
Thank you, Jayne!
weirdelf
16 years 3 months ago
all the above but...
Ian The Poet
16 years 3 months ago
Very good I liked it
panaella
16 years 2 months ago
Gothic...