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Wind chimes in the garden

Shall we both go and get drunk
And I can put some records on
Then if you would like us to
We can both just sing along

I will dedicate this song to you
Northern Uproars 'A girl I once knew'
"Oh, sing it again, will you sing it again
From beginning right to the end"

Let's go listen to the wind chimes in the garden
Did you show me a loving sign, oh, beg your pardon.

Darling, may I have this one dance
Shall I swing you round and round
We dance like two seven year olds
Having fun back in the old playground

I will make sure I won't drop you
I promise that will always be true
"promise me again, will you promise me again
Like you would as childhood friends"

Let's go listen to the wind chimes in the garden
Did you show me a loving sign, oh, beg your pardon

You'll leave me sat on the bench
My kness tucked up under my chin
I know our time is running out
I try to hold my sorrow in

So tell me did you have a good night
If we should kiss, would that not be right?
Can I taste you, oh let me taste you
Please, before this night's through

Let's go listen to the wind chimes in the garden
Did you show me a loving sign, oh beg your pardon
As you asked so nicely I will sing just one more
Then you can leave me behind and close the door
 
— Millage, Jan 03, 2010

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magics02

16 years 5 months ago

Loved this

I really enjoyed this poem as it shared alot of love and warmth and the write was very good. First time I visited you and will visit again. Blessings from Florida magics02
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Millage

16 years 5 months ago

I sincerely thank you...

..... for your kind words. It really does mean a lot. And so do the five stars. You are too kind. Much love Millage x
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Arrow

16 years 4 months ago

Ouch.

This has the sting of the pathetic (not your writing, the subject). It reminds me of Miss Lonelyhearts from Vertigo. I like the refrain. I always hated wind chimes; they sound so empty. My complaint is the erratic rhythm. I feel it needs a strong regular beat, like an abandoned but operational merry-go-round.
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Millage

16 years 4 months ago

I appreciate your comments...

....But the rhythm was actually written erratic like that on purpose. I thank you for your comments and taking the time to read it though. Much love Millage x
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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Just chiming in here..not attacking in no means or ways...

I was kind of reading this and said oh my the wind chime as it blows in the wind is such a beautiful sound and miss lonely hearts thats interesting too...maybe we shall start a lonely hearts club and hang chimes all over as the wind takes us to the next challenge at hand. Oh and I should mention the merrygoround how lovely is that...and do not take offense here I am just merely stating my opinion, no need for a response but do so as you wish arrow, as I know people read more into things that really are not intended for the poet at hand. Millage is a good writer and I hope he sends me many more beautiful wind chimes..until then I shall ride on the merry go round of life. peace and love arrow xoxoxo Ms Mona
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Millage

16 years 4 months ago

Too kind....

....Calling me young! :-) Thank you again Mona. My new found buddy Much love Mllage x
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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

My chap

My lips with chap has on my hat he is one of a kind this buddy of mine tip the hat and don't look back for you are one helluva chap!! peace loved one Mona xoxoxo