Thoughts Composed While Reading Frost

(please don't be offended. this is my first criticism and i'm trying to stick to your questions above) :) i think the title works very well as long as the first few lines are there as a hook (it's appropriate)... as a stand-alone, though, it's pretty ordinary. as far as the language / pacing, both were excellent- the variety of vocabulary / analogy make along with it's perfect flow make the poem. thanks for sharing!

I like this Lonnie as it is direct and to the point. The title works for me in so much as I can see how the thoughts emerged and it is interesting but adds nothing specific to the body of the poem. As an old Irish saying goes ...'a spade is a spade' ...we are what we are made but then throw in the thought , are we the what we have the potential to become? As poets we are all linked in thought and word. Seabhac

This poem has the grace of directness. Which is to say - chalk full of courage. Personally, I invest where the poet invests. If a poet wishes to petrify into a kind of poetic rock with the same moss always matted through words, then I will not wander there. Art is movement and exploration. It is particularly exploration of ourselves and our fears. It is self-doubt and branded cherries, drunk from the same glass, each of which might choke us. Poetry is not merely the comfort of forgetting the real with a long indenture-ship in the anachronistic. Here you have a poem. Only the meaning makes it speak. You can find many methods in addition. Will you? If you do, there will be no separate need to beckon. Brian

fantastic lonnie! very smooth and enjoyable. :)

This poem is very good for pondering about things and their purposes. 'There is no doubt that apple trees excell in arts of growing nor any reason to believe that Winter’s just for snowing' And you, my friend must know that you excell in pointing out these ponderous truths, through writing and poetry. I am not in love with the title, but the rhyme is good and the pacing feels just right. Yours, Deelilah

Your style is yours and though that style may not a be liked by some it is yours non the less. You have found what works best for you whether it be the same moss intertwining or not. A rule of thumb it is not mandatory that you use a "hook" if you are writing poetry, however in music the hook is usually your title. You could use a better title but it does not have to be "the hook" How bout something like On pondering Frost or After thoughts on Frost Chrys

Hi, The title I thought was a pun...Frost....associated with winter? If it was unintentional...a happy slip of genius. Ells