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Will love become, or overcome me?

Are you really thinking that love will become meYou never know, I'll wait for my one opportunityI can't hold out forever, my patience wearing thinI lie to myself over, 'bout when our love will begin Gripping my hands tightly and waiting for the callI feel the sadness rising and then I feel it fallThe sorrow is seeming to drown my broken heartIn this sad love story, I seem to have the main part But whenever I see you, I kid myself once moreThat we'll be together like I had dreamt beforeYou have unwittingly, got your hooks in meand it is a restraint that I don't want to break free Suppose my way of thinking is rather shallowIt's my fault I'm hurting, I built my own gallowsFeel the noose is tightening as I take my final bowYou can release the trapdoor, my pain is over now. 
— Millage, Nov 16, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear M

How are you darlin ? ... I really like this one ... but felt that the first two lines that dont rhyme detract from the write but other than that ... I love it Love and hugs Jayne x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

What first two lines that

What first two lines that don't rhyme? Pay not attention to Jayne dearest, she's got dragons on her mind. (love your new avatar... reminds me of a poem I wrote a long time ago.) Hugs, Anna "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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Millage

16 years 6 months ago

I thank you....

.....once more for youe kind words Anna. I also laughed at your comment about Jayne and her "2 lines not rhyming" Ha ha ha. Will message you again soon. Promise I will, Much love Millage x
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

OK I am soooo not explaining

OK I am soooo not explaining that I will never live it down sorry mile man LOL jesus wheres my head at tonight? lol nopes he not answering ... anyone ? lol love and hugs Jayne x x x
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Millage

16 years 6 months ago

Ha ha ha

No worries Hun. I kind of wondered what you meant? Good that Anna keeps you in order. Thank you very much for the upgrade form 4 stars to five. I will e mail you soon. Promise. Much love Millage x