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Millage
Nov 08, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Sunny girl

She could brighten up the dullest day
If she just decided to glance my way
Her sparkling eyes and her infectious smile
Steal my thoughts away for a while

And she would make things seem alright
If she ever chose to hold me tight
And how I want to tell her so
That I would never let her go (if she were mine)

Someone so beautiful, she shines so bright
For her I'd gladly steal the stars at night
Her aching beauty enveloped my mind
That is the one image I'd never leave behind

She could grasp my hand
Then kiss me gently as I planned
And I want to tell her so
It could happen again tomorrow




— Millage, Nov 08, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear M....... lol

this ones euphoric ... seriously ... thats the feel I get from it ... well done mile man ;) hugs of love Jayne x x
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Millage

16 years 7 months ago

Ha ha ha

My name gets shorter and shorter. It's great to hear from you again my hun. I hope you are feeling better. It was only a 'pipe dream' but that's a start eh? Take care. Much love Millage x
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 7 months ago

Millage

I thought this was great and beautiful. My only suggestion if you will, is in stanza 3. Maybe remove "has" all together and remove "and" all together in stanza 4. It seems to flow better for me. It is only a suggestion if you choose, either way it is a beautiful poem. I love it from beginning to end. The rhyming is awesome. Dreams are a beautiful thing. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
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Millage

16 years 7 months ago

Barbara

Many thanks for your kindness. I am very flattered and chuffed that you liked it so much. Like you say, 'dreams are beautiful things' (Which is a beautiful thing to say in itself) Thank you one again. Much love Millage x
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

wow

This was just beautiful! i loved it. Love, Greeneyes
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Millage

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you

Thank you Greeneyes (what a gorgeous pen-name by the way). You are far too kind. I am flattered. Much love Millage x
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Millage

This poem reminded me of a distant crush, so get your skates on mate and go get your Sunny Girl. Whatcha waiting for, you have written a delectable poem, so now I want part 2. Lovely poem, sweet. Love from Lyz. XX
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Millage

16 years 6 months ago

thank you beautiful

Once again for your kindness. You say the nicest things. Much love Millage x
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

You are welcome

Best wishes and love from Lyz. XX