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Malovelent Messiah

Behold the angry anthropoid
hear him bark and growl
see him dripping gobs of foam
from his unshaven jowl

Is his demeanor any less
than what a God's should be?
does he forego the priviledge
of dying to be free?

Does he forage history
for postulants who'll pray
to any shape that feeds their needs
and sings their pain away?

Or,  is his odd divinity
more rigid and unreal,
his unrelenting warlike words
too honest in their zeal?

Flaccid man-things call him Lord
and congregate within
their darkened dens of servitude
to worship and to sin

and all the wretched pestilence
he struggles to control
erupts with demon frenzy
from the Evil of his soul

C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Oct 25, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Lonnie

This is truly awesome. You are talented I must say. I enjoyed this immensely, Thanks, Lyz. XX
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Much appreciated, Lyz!

Thanks once again for taking the time to comment, and I'm very happy that this piece was to your liking!
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 7 months ago

Lonnie...

You are indeed a powerhouse of wordings each and every time I read you... this, I wonder if you had someone in-particular in mind, because there are many names one could attach here... well written account of times past and to be Richard
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you, Richard!

As for who, or what I had in mind, let's just say many names could be applied and still be appropriate! Glad you stopped by to read this, and even more glad that you enjoyed the read!
yenti

yenti

16 years 7 months ago

Lonnie

As usual a great piece of writing, and can I say that with the new picture that portrays a settled man, then the writing that portrays other things than a little sorrow. It is so good to see you come back to top line writing, we missed you here. Yours Ian.T
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks so much, Ian!

It's always a pleasure hearing from you, and I'm glad you thought this was a good piece of work! I wasn't sure, really, when I posted it, but your opinion must make it acceptable! Thanks again!
yenti

yenti

16 years 7 months ago

Lonnie

A seperate reply, to wish you both all the love and happiness, and your work here is as I said top line, Now I may see little, subtle, things in your work I bet you wont be able to hide them LOL Have a great life My friend, Yours Ian
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Lonnie

What I liked about this was I was able to relate to every line and put a face to this person. I am sure you had someone in particular you wrote about, but it fitted my person too. You have a way to draw people in with your writing...I am reading and learning from you, I like your style. "to honest in their zeal" - should that be 'too'? thanks for posting this, it has made my day, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

My deepest thanks, Sir!

You seem to have gotten more out of this than anyone else so far! I'm thrilled that it reached you on such a level!
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

When a poet writes with

When a poet writes with singularity and clarity, well, all I can say is no *Male-volent* Messiah shall be left unsung. ;-) ~A Did you mean *ma*love*lent*? "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you kind Lady!

I am always grateful when you take the time to stop by and post a word or two on one of my humble offerings!
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poewriter58

16 years 7 months ago

Bear

All I can say to this one is WOW. You know you are churning them out , but they are far from one another. No one can call your writing mundane. Ah Ha that's why I am marrying you lol Me
yenti

yenti

16 years 7 months ago

Me and You

Hey you two I haven't received the invite yet, I am so pleased that there is love in the air, it is way past time to be giving up all those shadows and go running naked in the sunlite snow as it were LOL. I give you both the happiness of the children and the unconditional love they hold, take each day and make it the best there ever is, My thoughts to you both, Ian.T