Bit Off More Than I Could Chew

I thought
I could
do it
without any
problems
It didn't look
too terribly big
It started out
all smooth
and easy
Thought this
is way too breezy
laughing ha ha
I'm on a roll
following you
down
the road
how can
this be
so pleasey
Ooops
hit a bump
oh no
how did
this happen
I've lost
my footing
thought it
could be
a flu
all the
cows
went moo
maybe I
need some
voo-doo
guess I
bit off
more than
I could
chew

— Fleur MacDonald, Aug 24, 2009

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Country/Region: AUS

Critiques

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Fleur

Are you doing what in this one ???? hmmmm I really wanna know sounds like your skateboarding or :O I dont want to think lol .... he he he oh woman this one screwed my head Up trying to work out wtf you were doing ... wow nothing like a good mind fuck ... he he he Love youuuuu Jayne x x ""We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall"" ...

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 10 months ago

Actually,

I was given a directive from my sixtoeight.net partner James P Gilmour for his upcoming show "Ruckus", he gave me the line "Bit off more than I could chew". I could have done anything with it, like take a photo, film, do a painting or whatever, but chose to do a poem. This work will end up on the Ruckus blog hopefully before Friday when the show opens. If you want to check Ruckus out go to ruckusbrand.blogspot.com sixtoeight.net will be reporting on the even. I'm looking forward to that. So I'm sorry my dear if I have let you down with such a non exciting excuse, and you will never catch me on a skateboard, maybe roller skates! he he Have you ever heard of Fluxus? Well this is a 2009 version! Love you darling xxxx thankyou for my 5 stars.

lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Fleur,

I liked it, made me smile.It reminded me of the night my hubby made me walk miles, under the influence along a pitch black country road, and yes, there were cows. I like a bit of satire Lyz.

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 9 months ago

Excellent

it's a huge plus when I can put a smile on someones face. Thank you :)fleur Your hubby needs a spanking for doing that to you!!

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