Evening Breathes in the Kitchen

Hi Jayne, thanks for the comment, sorry taken me so long to acknowledge it :) Omi and I have been poorly and quarantined at a friend's house, over the worst now. Hope you're doing ok babe. Happy you felt this to be a walloping one hon :) thanks for title suggestion, I feel more comfortable with the title I have now I've had some time away from the poem lol funny things aren't they? Must check out what you've been up to lovely, Omi napping now which will hopefully afford me time to catch up here, will hope to see you again later hon ;) much love to you and hugs xxx

Thanks Nathaniel, happy you liked it :) and the title does need the 'the' doesn't it, if I want to keep kitchen bit in there. Cheers. Feel like I haven't read you in ages catch up soon, much love Beki xx

Thank you Rick! I think you know what your comment means to me :) and how lovely to see your smiling face (did love Poo though ;) lol) Hope you're well Rick, read you soon, much love and hugs Beki xx

Hi diatom shells, thank you for stopping to comment, I'm open to any feedback on all of my poetry and am happy to expand on the poem. Simply put there is nothing else, in the poem I was only hoping to convey the light really, that's all there was. I often try and capture a moment, a snapshot, I'm fond of the haiku form, and suppose this poem is of a similar ilk, this time I wanted to capture the light inside the poem, describing it in a way so as to enable the reader to see it, I hope that was effective. Thank you again for the read and the comment, much love Beki xx

Arrow, thank you so much for stopping here and taking time to comment. You're right about stripey, it is too cute, it's quite me but doesn't suit the light I was describing, will edit momentarily. I'm so happy the poem was effective for you. I'm not sure what I intended other than to try and describe the light as I experienced it but I did have a 'stalking' feeling as I sat, there was something beautiful, yet ominous about the way the lamplight played in the kitchen and instead of switching the inside light on, I sat in the dark and composed this lol what does that say about me ;) Thanks again Arrow, much love Beki xx

Molly, thank you for your comment, that you say something of this light will stay with you means an awful lot to me. I'm fostering a love of the ordinary, I do think there is beauty in it, I'm over the moon that you found some here, thanks again, much love Beki xx

Thanks Molly, I'm much happier with it now I've had some space away from the poem. more love Beki xx

Funny you say that O, I frequently read you that way, your longer pieces more perhaps, like watching a series of scenes unfolding, each scene like a mini poem. I'm over the moon that this piece impressed and suprised you and that you liked it :) I do feel I am learning here constantly and I am becoming a better writer as a result. Thanks for stopping by O it really means rather a lot to me, much love Beki xx Ps too cool? from the master of cool that is a compliment ;) x