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Move

The bed is a world between us.
You turn to face the wall and I
face the door.

The polite "good mornings"
are all well and said, harsh
whispers at the early dawn.

You make your coffee
and stroll to the deck,
these days I don't
even ask for a cup.

The routine has set in
like a black cloud in this
old house. I don't ask
for much.

A rare touch is all that
is shared, a tender moment
that is thoughtless and
mournful.

You don't notice the
boxes near the room,
empty now, but waiting
for treasure.

A plane ticket on the counter
doesn't seem to phase you,
near the keys that I left for
you.

No need for letters and notes
you won't even notice when
I am gone.

 

— dina grey, Jun 19, 2009

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Region, Country: Coastal area, NC

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Hemminway, Too many.....will add in time.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Awwwww Dina

You made me well up with this one ... huni its poignant and beautiful ... and if this is about you ... sorry his loss is the worlds gain ... and if its not ... bloody well writen .. you drew emotion out of this old bird ...Love Jayne x
DG

dina grey

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks

Your kind words are well received. Thanks, Dina
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Dina...

Love can start out so good, but often ends up just like you've described here in this generous poem... it isn't something that can be helped I think... just two drifting apart... we all deserve to be noticed and cared for... Much strength in your character revealed here... thank you for sharing this moment of clarity with us... Richard
DG

dina grey

16 years 11 months ago

So true

So true so much can just drift away. Communication seems to be lacking these days. Thank you, Dina
CN

Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

very nicely caught

the bed is a world between us..these days I don't even ask for a cup. So easily takes one into that hollow space, great write Dina. Love. Craig
DG

dina grey

16 years 11 months ago

Hollow cup

I like that. It is the simple and kind things that seem to diminish first. Thank you for your words. Dina