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faerybeki
faerybeki
Apr 24, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dappled Dreams

Hope hangs in the air
mingling with the sunshine
my dreams are dappled
— faerybeki, Apr 24, 2009

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meic

17 years 1 month ago

Lovely: but if you are

Lovely: but if you are keeping to the 5 7 5 syllable convention you are one short on the second line ... maybe adding something like 'bright' 'warm' or 'Spring' before sunshine to make up the shortfall. Just a suggestion Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
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Craig Norris

17 years 1 month ago

Real nice one

Hiya Beki, Getting my appreciation of this form reawakened, did the syllable count and Meic is right I believe. However I think I might have discovered where it went, I thought I saw it "mingling within the sunshine" Craig
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

'ello boys!

glad you both liked this one! In my own head I'm hearing min-gle-ing (3 syllables) so I thought it was right! I guess this one is down to pronunciation eh? Thanks for reading guys and taking time to comment, always appreciated :)much love to you both b xx
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Craig Norris

17 years 1 month ago

The outer reaches

Yes Beki I come from the outer reaches, the far Antipodes, where speach has been kicked 'round in the dust, but this word min-gle-ing I know it not. Is it perhaps some fairy dance, obscure Pixie sentiment perchance? Craig
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Lol! perhaps it is a faery

Lol! perhaps it is a faery word, i can check the pixie dictionary if you like, but I thought if you added -ing to mingle it became mingling! (which the faeries pronounce ming-ger-ling :) but they have been known to mislead, infact they enjoy it!) much love b x
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meic

17 years 1 month ago

Ah! Faerie … I forgot that

Ah! Faerie ... I forgot that ancient language ... hmmm ... I get it now: 'ming-ger-ling' - which is what you do to get you 'ting-ger-ling' That explains it - ignore my suggestion! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

:) lol, you get it, hooray!

:) lol, you get it, hooray! there'll be much dancing and sprink-ker-ling of faery dust tonight, I'm anticipating sneezes! :) much love b x
professor

professor

17 years 1 month ago

Loved its simplicity Beki

and especially because i know exactly what you are seeing and feeling being under the same beautiful Spring sunshine skies we are having in England. Seems today is still good over here to...but maybe not for you? I sure need an injection of hope right now and an early morning walk in the woods and looking at all the acres of yellow flowered rape seed oil fields and the blossom filled trees is such a Van Gogh type experience in this part of the old country right now. Keith x
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Keith, so glad you liked

Hi Keith, so glad you liked it, thanks for commenting. I'm sending thoughts, smiles and a sprinkling of faery dust in the hope that it will give you the injection you need :) I love the great British spring, so beautiful, the yellow of the rape seed you mention is so glorious. It started bright here today but seems to have clouded over a bit now, hope the sunshine stays with you today keith, much love b xx
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orgami

17 years 1 month ago

dappled I knew I saw this

I hear Min gl ing as three rather then Ming ling actually it can be applied as both missed this poem but found it wonderful!!
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Hey Orgami, glad you found

Hey Orgami, glad you found it and glad you like it! I do like little haikus, this one came while I was sitting on the steps leading to my little garden. and I was wondering if both pronunciations of 'mingling' were correct :) thanks for swinging by O, much love b x