faerybeki

Apr 19, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Seamstress of Broken Hearts

Point me to where it hurts
I'll be a soothing balm
in all the darkest parts
of you, I'll lather calm

Point me towards your pain
I'll be a cooling salve
I'll listen and I'll tend
grown over garden paths

Point me to where you gape
I'll sew you with love's thread
with blanket stitch of hope
and knitted strength of lead

Point me to where you feel
that life just can't go on
In the darkest parts of you
I will weave a beacon

Point me to where you're blind
I'll darn your eyes with light
Seamstress of broken hearts
embroiderer of insight

— faerybeki, Apr 19, 2009

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faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Kelsey, thanks for the

Hi Kelsey, thanks for the comment and glad you liked the poem, will ponder your suggestion as still not sure on that last stanza! Cheers babe, much love b xx

meic

17 years 1 month ago

A nicely compact poem of

A nicely compact poem of devoted sympathy and TLC Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Thank you Mike for reading

Thank you Mike for reading and commenting, I'm great at devotion and TLC for others but am only just getting good at extending it to myself! :) much love b x

meic

17 years 1 month ago

You’re welcome - and keep

You're welcome - and keep working at it [extending it to myself]. You deserve no less Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~

Arrow

17 years 1 month ago

Maybe something like:

Point me to where you're blind I'll be a lantern bright Past tripping rocks on cliffs I'll guide you out of night I'm not sure about ending with reason. Reason has limitations in its healing ability and is only one part of insight. I assume you're talking more about insight than about logical thinking in the last stanza.

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Wow, I love your suggestion,

Wow, I love your suggestion, maintains the same rhythm and flow. (still feel a bit odd about incorporating others words into my poems, like stealing or cheating or something!) think I meant weave (a) reason to carry on but can see now how it might be read differently. Thanks Arrow for helping to shed some light on this one for me. much love b x

Arrow

17 years 1 month ago

Your next to last stanza is your strongest

and reflects your title. Maybe it would work better at the end. Well, you can ponder it.

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Ponder it I did :)

Have edited that stanza and added a new one, undoubtedly inspired by your comment! Thank you Arrow, much love b x

Arrow

17 years 1 month ago

Ah, yes!

Good! An intriguing image. There's seeing then there's insight.

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

If I ever need repair I’m bundling myself up to post to you!

Hey bunny, woohoo, you little beauty! What a sweet bit of poetry. Darn (ergh sorry, bad pun) good work.. Looks like you've tweeked away to your little cross stitch hearts delight. Nice to catch you here. PS If I ever need repair I'm bundling myself up in a brown paper package ..."tied up with string" & posting myself to you (oooh another bad pun if you caught that one!). xxx Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Giggle :)

I'd happily patch you up honey, if you needed it, but I'm rather afraid I wouldn't want to post you back! :) xx