Blind in the Mind

Thoughts dancing in
darkness, which do
not bring understanding,

Circumvented by things
a mind refuses to
capture,

Hearing music from a
place which is beyond
reality,

Pictures momentarily flash
on a blank screen, which
can not be focus,

All thoughts are void of any
true color, there is only the
blackest of black or the
whites of white,

From inside a hollow place
is heard the snapping of a
synapses,

Slowly and without provocation,
a blank stare brings the
appearance of a grin,

A grin that is loss to those who
are not aware, a place where the
sane will not tread there,

Chemicals begin to mix,
metamorphsing a blank canvas
from black and white to vibrant
colors,

But it is seen only through a single
eye of a creative mind, the artisan
who see's that which is skewed,

Revealing the individual artist for
all to see, those who are
blind in the mind.

— Eduardo Cruz, Feb 21, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

Critiques

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 3 months ago

D.D.

You have seen, and I congratulate you! It's not what I see, it's whats beyond the closed door, that is momentarily opened and seen only in a flash! The rest is hidden to speculation. thanks for coming by to read! Eddie Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track, Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 3 months ago

Eduardo

It is always a pleasure to read your work -so absorbing -so captivating -written with vision. To see through the eyes of the artisan revealing to those blind in the mind. What an eloquence! Have you read my latest work? -Mohammad A Quatrain from my book Rubai'yat of Josh Malihabadi -A Drop and the Ocean: The hammer of time took a start And broke me into pieces short Soon after I journeyed in search of happiness The beast of anguish tore me apart.

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Eddie...

I see... and feel the way your character feels at times... going where the so-called sane dare not enter... I loved the grin... the knowing, seeing through... yes, for me, this poem works very well. Now of course there are a couple of spots that could be changed a bit to improve your poem... but these would only be suggestions as I think it works quite well as is... but I feel I know you and am able to read in-between some lines that others may not... the first three stanzas were great... the fourth one, the idea was great but not said correctly... the short fix would be to change "focus" to "focused" but I think you could add a flavor of the surreal magic by adding the word "blurred" in the stanza somewhere before the inability to focus... just an idea! a grin that is loss to those who are not aware, a place where the sane will not tread there... like I said before, I love the grin and know it... but I think this needs a little something... for one thing "loss" should probably be "lost"... the "who are" I feel is unneeded as well as the "there" on the next line... just suggestions though because like I said already... it is a good write with substance... an enjoyable read... Richard