The Senses Six

I saw an eagle swirling upwards upon the thermals.
He dropped a feather silently.
I caught it, and enjoyed the
'plip-plip-plip' sound it made
whilst running it through a railing.
There was a detraction from the moment -
a smell, like burning leaves.
And an acridity of taste that would not leave.
And I knew the end was near.....

* Thanks to Tink for the topic. This has been rewritten from the one I posted in chat, but only slight modifications were made.

— infinite_dwarf, Feb 11, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

Critiques

prayersbyPatty

17 years 3 months ago

Dwarf

Love it, I like how the feather fell but never made it to the ground and went plimp, plimp, plimp on the railing, and yes a moment in time that ended to soon. Sure wish we could still burn leaves..... I don't think its good for the air, but it sure brings back memories of childhood..... Thanks for that. Patty

infinite_dwarf

17 years 3 months ago

thanks Patty

I was actually trying to go to the other end of the spectrum, with the foretelling of death. I never thought of it your way, and I like it! Yours seems more cheerful. Thanks. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"As you slide down the banister of life, may the splinters never point in the wrong direction!" -"God is good, but never dance in a small boat."

infinite_dwarf

17 years 3 months ago

thank you

The adjustments were purely accidental, as I couldn't remember the exact poem that I had written in chat. I'm glad they worked out, though! I so love that picture!! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"As you slide down the banister of life, may the splinters never point in the wrong direction!" -"God is good, but never dance in a small boat."

Quillsvein1

17 years 3 months ago

very compact

and tight, Jess. the poor eagle! what i caught here was the descriptive emphasis, sort of like WCW. good job. GB

infinite_dwarf

17 years 3 months ago

John

Poor eagle? They lose feathers all the time. Actually, I'd see it as a sign of luck if I caught a feather out of mid-air. I feel honored to be compared to WC Wampler - he's a fantastic poet. Thank you. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"As you slide down the banister of life, may the splinters never point in the wrong direction!" -"God is good, but never dance in a small boat."