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Eduardo Cruz

Nov 09, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Us Two

let's speak softly as if we were
praying in a language of pure
understanding,

so that together we can find in
our souls that which is only
found in the peace of two who
are joined,

let's discard all that we suffered
in our yesterdays,

and let us concentrate on all the
beauty that we have found in
our hearts today,

we have seen that now we are
ready to commit to today and
every day here after,

because of the birth of our love
and deep understanding of each
others needs,

so take my hand and walk with
me into a life filled with the
comfort of an old pair of shoes,

that can take us beyond all that
can only be promised in the
joining of two like hearts,

that will forever be filled with
the love that we share between
us two.

— Eduardo Cruz, Nov 09, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Critiques

17 years 7 months ago

Just Beautiful

I love the specialness this has. The line, comfort of an old pair of shoes, love can't get any better that in the Golden years. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

17 years 6 months ago

The same line got me,

The same line got me, Barbara. Nice work. It's sad that after all these years, i won't have anyone to share my golden years, even though my x and i are friendly. But then again who knows how long I'll live Beautiful soulful love, Eddie. Some of us found our soulmates. ~A p.s. the first line is exquiste...

17 years 6 months ago

My friends

I keep find more and more relationships not lasting, I've been with my wife 40yrs, but I can honestly say that we've had some dragged out wars. There been peaks and valleys. looking back I can see that there were more valleys, but we never said die. After all these years it is not love it is understanding each others needs, and the support that brings. love is not what time brings time brings letting go of all the small things of the pass and just looking ahead to tomorrow. thank you to both of you for stopping by and recognizing what love is and what it becomes, an old Pair of shoes. Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego

17 years 6 months ago

Wonderful Eddie

Love is understanding, compromising, supporting, sharing, working together and a deep lasting friendship and last, but not least a comfortable old pair of shoes, jeans, shirt or robe. You've got me beat my friend, I've only been together with my wife for 33 years, 34 in February. I did get it right this second time around. I think to many marriages break up these days because of the me syndrome. What I want, what you want. Not what we want. My wife and I understand each other.She has things she wants to do, I have things I want to do and we have things we want to do. I also think you have to be friends and partners first, lovers second. Well, anyway, good poem and my nickles worth of opinion. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008

17 years 6 months ago

Rett

my ace coon boon from the moon! I gave it to my wife to read after I had posted it. she came into the room after she read it and clocked me in the head and said, how dare you call me an old pair of shoes in front of the world. I said, now I feel like a beat up pair of shoes. LOL!! tough old bag, she can still kick me around. Rett, I know my wife since I'm two yrs old. we started dating at 13. I just love the feeling when I tell people how long we've been together! thanks for commenting and 34 is a great year for good aged wine. Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego

17 years 6 months ago

ROFL

That sounds exactly like something mine would do also. I have known this wife since I was 14 and she was 9. I had to make a few more mistakes and screw up a marriage (it was screwed from the beginning) before she grew up enough for me to marry her when she was 17. With her parents permission of course. I may have been wild as a march hare, but I wasn't stupid. *LOL* May you have many more my friend! Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008

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Albert Chmura

17 years 6 months ago

Mr. Cruz

Absolutely beautiful. AC

17 years 6 months ago

Al,

first let me say welcome to Neopoet, "land of the freed poets" I'm very happy you enjoyed it, hope to see you around on the site! thanks, Eddie PS. just Eddie Mr. Cruz sounds to formal and old. LOL! "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego

17 years 6 months ago

Eddie

You have me beat as well - only 7 years here. I hope that we can one day say that we're celebrating 40 years together. I'm happy that you were able to find someone who understands you so well! ~Veg ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"When I was strong, strong in the sound thought I'd see when day was done. Now I'm weaker than the palest blue Oh so weak in this need for you" - Nick Drake

17 years 6 months ago

Veg.

you want to get Jai off the furniture. Understand me , oh no she tolerates my stupidity. I don't know why, but I like it. (his Doctor said, don't worry Mrs. Cruz his much better now.) 7 years is when your at the peck now the valley is coming hold on tight and you'll be fine. at 15 yrs that when it levels out. thanks veggie for stopping by. Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Dago

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prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

Hey esquire Cruz

Wow what a beautiful write, including the valleys. without them no mountain tops. Its good to know that some people believe in commitment. Awesome is all I can say. Patty

17 years 6 months ago

Patty,

your dog has contacted me about the child. he feels (the dog) that he's not getting the attention he deserves, because of the child and wants to know if he can get an order of protection, so as to keep the child at less one thousand feet off the property line. I believe we can settle this out of court. These are our demands: 1- more walks 2- more petting 3- better chew toys 4- his own room you will be receiving a letter with these demands. Just sign and return to my Office. Fast E. Cruz Esquire Patty I'm so happy you enjoyed. thanks always from your bud, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

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prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

Your funny Eddie

The child is gone, she live with me only. She gets more than most dogs as she is my empty nest baby. She has a tread mill, but refuses to use it after a failed attempt to keep up the pace. I have met all the demands, except for the walks, she prefers to run wild around the back, which is fenced in for her protection. She is actually famous with the police, she cornered a murder suspect and held the suspect until the police came and arrested her. Suspect on foot never had a chance. Now convicted and serving time. Thanks to the famous wonderful Hope. Patty

17 years 6 months ago

Patty,

What a great dog, great story, do you have a poem about Hope's escapees. She's a golden retriever, right? thanks for the info Patty, Eddie "another robber foiled by Superdog"

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prayersbyPatty

17 years 6 months ago

We recently had a robbery in the neighborhood

The neighborhood watch called me about where Hope was and did she see anything or bark in that menacing way, alas we were at my sisters. The suspect she caught was an 18 yr old female who was on foot. The two gentlemen with her thought she would get away better on foot. Hope can look at someone and tell me whether that person is evil. The neighbors were in Acapulco, so this girl thought that their back yard would be a good place to hide, cruisers all over the neighborhood. I heard the gunshot and called the police and told them, If you have a shooting I heard 10 minutes ago my dog broke her chain again (bought three) she will not let up while I was on the phone the police pulled in their driveway. They cuffed the girl and brought Hope back to me and gave her treats. There is one cop that swears she had some training, she does not bite but he wants her. Told him I got her at a shelter Her name was Grover. I changed it to Hope, and would not sell her for a million dollars. When she barks, it is usually a meter reader or someone she does not know,all the neighbors say hi to her. They feel she makes the neighborhood safer.Yes she is a yellow lab/retriever. Sorry to post this one your poem, but thought people might want to know. The scary part was the three were convicted of murder. Glad she left the gun in the car. Patty Any copying of this report will result in a reprimand from my attorney slick Cruz.

17 years 6 months ago

Patty,

I know you have the dog hope, but still be care. criminals know how to get around a dog. God bless you and protect you! thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego

17 years 6 months ago

Valleys

Been reading these good comments. And is good to hear. Been 17 years here. Been in the valley that long also. Hope to reach the mountaintop one day. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

17 years 6 months ago

Barbara,

the mountain is the love you have for each other it does get higher than that. 17 yrs. you've seen and climbed that mountain. your on level ground now. enjoy it. If you start looking for more heights you'll fly away and you'll be lost! thanks, Eddie "doubt me! My dim companion! Why, God would be content with a fraction of the life Poured thee, without a stint The whole of me - forever" Emily Dickinson

17 years 6 months ago

enjoy reading

good experience glad to know they do exist Respectfully Yours, Barbara

17 years 6 months ago

Barb,

I'm happy too, that you've taken the time to revisit my poem, thank you! Eddie

17 years 6 months ago

fly, fly, brids

why is that all parents feel this way to inclued myself, we can't wait for them to fly the nest. Julie my yougest is 19 and my oldest just turned 38. All I have is one left to go, and right now she's hardly ever home, with college and working. So it's like she's left already. Except she's still asking for money. Julie thanks for stopping by and commenting. Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

17 years 6 months ago

it makes for a continuing

it makes for a continuing thread... like the birds of spring that return to nest Love. ~A

17 years 6 months ago

Anna,

thanks for coming by to read it's always a pleasure to here from you. Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego

17 years 6 months ago

Us Two

Eddie, As I read this I felt a peace about your relationship, the ebbs and flows very well written~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________

17 years 6 months ago

Janice,

beautiful tag line. I happy you stopped to read and enjoyed it! Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

17 years 6 months ago

You are a Lucky Man....

not everyone is accepting enough to find the right one... I feel I have also... 12 years and counting... I had to try it twice before finding and "snatching" my current wife... Us Two... a very good write Eddie... thank you for sharing your happiness with us... Richard

17 years 6 months ago

hey Richard,

Yes I am, but 12yrs is as well lucky. My hope when I wrote this, was to inspire other couples to hang in there for marriage is a wonderful thing, if your willing to give of yourself. thanks Richard for your comment. Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego

17 years 6 months ago

Jan,

you are right it is also sensual, thanks for picking up on that. thank you so much for your comment and the XO Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego

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17 years 6 months ago

Cruz Its Wonderful!

I got lost in the deepness of your words... Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove: (Shakespeare) Wafi

17 years 6 months ago

Wafi,

first of all let me say, welcome to Neopet: "land of the freed poets" It's a beautiful thing when we get lost in what we understand! I do appreciate your generous comment. thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego