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like a breeze,

The 'idea" is like a gentle
breeze that passes over me

Only to evaporate into the
singularity that is the wind,

The 'idea" is captured in a
brief moment, like a dream
that dissipates as slumber
retreats,

The 'idea" that's held and
released will fly above the
highest tree, like a wisp,

cascading into millions of
thoughts, carrying the "idea"
across the broadest sea's,

like the sea the"idea" has
depths you can not see,

To fathom it, is a scholars
dream.

just a moment is all they
need to elaborate on tons
of sheets,

like the Cosmos endless
into infinity, in the simplicity
of all "idea's.

 

— Eduardo Cruz, Oct 15, 2008

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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whitetea

whitetea

17 years 7 months ago

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so many things to take in while reading this, thank you for putting this up.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

whitetea,

thanks for stopping by to read I appreciated it, and commenting. Eddie
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poewriter58

17 years 7 months ago

Perhaps “In a brief

Perhaps "In a brief moment" might flow better and "in the simplicity" nice writing Chrys
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Chrys

thank you for you keen "Eye". I have applied the changes, sounds much better. nice of you to stop by! thanks, Eddie
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Eddie

I like this poem, Nice right wisps me away. Patty
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purplemoondoll

17 years 7 months ago

cascading into millions

cascading into millions of thoughts, carrying the "idea" across the broadest sea’s, The flow and sharp imagery really bring this poem to life. I like the lyrical voice this carries and the theme is awesome. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Hey Kaz,

I do appreciate your stopping by, and your very generous comment, "awesome", WOW!! thanks I'm taken aback! thanks, Eddie
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rider68

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Eddie

You certainly have a way in which you execute and carry the reader to the end, this reads so very well with great imagination, really liked reading this......thanks very best regards....... Peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Peter

I glad you liked it, thanks for stopping by, Eddie