infinite_dwarf

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As Darkness Falls ( A co-write)

Many thanks to Rett for Stz. 1 & 3 - the best ones in the poem!

Once the dust settles, it will be clear
That none of us are who we claim to be.
For in the darkness all shall be seen
Is it man or beast controlling our destiny?

Wretched enough to make the blind recoil.
Our screams pierce the ears of the deaf.
The angels shrink back in fright.
And fervently cross themselves.

While in the darkness the truth is seen
Though no-one’s eyes dare look
And the darkening cloak descends
As icy fear grips a beating heart

Slowing it down.
Each beat further from the last.
As your eyes close
And you succumb…..

— infinite_dwarf, Oct 08, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

Critiques

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Jess...

well done! to you and Rett... the final stanza really closes it well! Richard

Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you Richard

It was a blast writing with Jess. It has been a long time since I co-wrote with anyone. I thought she did a great job on closing also. Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Jess

Holy Cow girl! that is two now,I have read tonight that totally blew me away! I think this is the best ever from you~ There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

lol thx!

Can't take all the credit, though. Rett wrote the first and third stanzas. :~) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Due to budget cutbacks, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off."

Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Jess, that last stanza is great

You nailed that down perfectly! Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

prayersbyPatty

17 years 8 months ago

Jess,/Rett I am speachless

The last stanza blew my mind...... Good job kudos to Rett and Jess This co-author is working well. Patty throws rainbows, Patty

Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Thanks Patty

It was a blast to write with Jess and I think her ending was fabulous! Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

easylife_2

17 years 7 months ago

Good write Jess/Rett

This is very good coming from both of you.It must have justified the amount of work that you both put in.Thanks.

Linda Moses

17 years 7 months ago

Jess/Rett

This is really good, and how you worked together to turn out such a great work

leonard daranjo

17 years 7 months ago

Hi Jess

This is mind blowing. The first line was what drew me to it. The last stanza: really great!!! Leonard

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

thank you all again!

Rett did a fantastic job with stz. 1&3, and it was a lot of fun writing with him. Thank you for all of your comments! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" - "Due to budget cutbacks, the light at the end of the tunnel has been turned off."