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orgami
Mar 03, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Levi

 

 

by the cold window

i combed your hair

while you shivered in your blanket

So lost were you in your last thoughts

the month of clinging for your wife

for your family who hated your new

life

 

watched it all from my bed

my torn pinned shoulder

took everyones order

cause you some could not read

 

I lied about my car crash

told them i fell from a tree

not the drunk man child

reckless on the road

 

Levi whom built North Bays

great subdivisions riding

on the bulldozer himself

 

shrunken down to the

frail white haired man

in July who was bitterly

cold from the open window

 

whose family fought about his

will and testament before he

took his last breath

and the wife who loved him

 

  O

 

 

— orgami, Mar 03, 2008
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eric ashford

18 years 4 months ago

This grabbed my attention

This grabbed my attention from first to last. Great writing, you open that window well for the reader. Praise eric
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orgami

16 years 9 months ago

and then

my mom died of cancer I stayed away but talked to her on the phone afraid to see her like that ashamed that I let her down so I thought just a no good bum full of shame and yet here I am struggling and doing some good she would be proud of me my dad old and frail finaly lost the grey sweater cardigan he gave me and yet he would be suprised that I kept it as long as I did and strange that i think of him more now then when I had that and Grant who cut my hair off in the half way house when we were all bald a group of us (four) hes gone Bob S is gone Grant had a great sense of humour and a bad heart people have to go and people have to stay and sometimes its not a decision but something a power that is beyond us makes and im okay with that today but I can still miss em'

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