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Lady Africa (Shakespearean sonnet)

 

Proud daughters with an ancient regal look;
Each undulated movement is a kiss.
Their bodies are the lady's open book
Of righteous, rhythmic, syncopated bliss.

Erotic ebony gives sinful shine
To skin which glistens bright the night unique.
Obsidian, delightful cherry wine;
Our transubstantiated Mozambique.

Her body like the river loves to flow;
She strides with prideful beauty - statuesque.
Oh woman Africa your passion glows
With lust imbued in rippled arabesque.

So sleek her silhouette as she strolls by,
A beauty born of royal blood Masai.

— easyeverett, Mar 02, 2008

Critiques

themoonman

themoonman

18 years 4 months ago

Welcome to Neopoet...

I can see your character strolling by..nicely done..In my opinion the flow was off a little..not enough to hurt the piece, but you could improve it...still..I see her..
EA

eric ashford

18 years 4 months ago

Not really my cup of tea

Not really my cup of tea this, but I do appreciate your word-craft and imagery. Well poemed eric

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