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Once Tame

 -Setting the night afire

within a warm blaze of beauty.

Outward, a bold shine of innocence.

She scents the wind with desire.

 

 

-Childlike, penetant, just,

All must earn her love.

Tried with fire and brimstone,

All pass through Hell to earn her trust.

 

 

-Once shattered was her heart.

Once a tamed soul.

Broken was a wild spirit.

But tamed now only in part.

 

 

-Now searching, looking, praying,

Though she really looks for noone.

She rides the clouds to tame the wild wind

That sets the pillars of her life to swaying.

 

 

-Then the wind whispers her name,

Softly, though with power.

It kisses her neck softly,

fingers entwined in her hair.

And the warm wind whispers her name.

       

          Adam Rogers

            20060203

— Soldier, Feb 20, 2008

Critiques

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poewriter58

18 years 5 months ago

Bravo!

This poem is perfect , the use of your words is true poetry to find one line that stands out , cannot be done "she scents the wind with desire" "she rides the clouds to tame the wild wind" these two lines are only two examples of how well your words produce great images NICE WORK Chrys
asiajy

asiajy

18 years 4 months ago

Well Done

It's absolutely beautiful. Elegant imagery. To be that bold, innocent 'she.'

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