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Tears of Blood

I gaze upon the crowd
my heart beating bursting out.

I can see their fear and their hate.

stretching my arms out wide
as blood drips from my side.

The people call me names
and spit upon my face.

I try to lift myself up
so I may breath awhile more...

but the pain in my feet
reflects the path to heavens door.

Friends and foes alike look at me.

You claim to take my life
do you not see?

These tears of blood I cry
so you may live your life.

I have walked with men
33 years with them...

then I was cast aside for the price of silver
beaten and tried like a criminal.

then hung here up high for the visual.

These tears of blood I cry
Forgive them father, as I die.


— DarkinAZ, Feb 07, 2008

Critiques

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cricket

18 years 5 months ago

very powerful

what a powerful write poet.. structure is good.. The words used are very expressive .. the last line says it all... sad yet well written and expressed.. BrownEyesBlue
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Calliope

18 years 5 months ago

You...

...have a great way with words that convey exactly what your trying to say.Nice! Lacy Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
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DarkinAZ

18 years 3 months ago

better late...

...than never... Thank you both. Sincerely, Mark
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purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

These tears of blood I cry,

These tears of blood I cry, so you may live your life I have walked with men, 33 years with them then I was cast aside, for the price of silver. You have a brilliant story telling voice, emotion felt all the way. Excellent. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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DarkinAZ

18 years 2 months ago

Thank you Kaz,

as always, I appreciate your comments. Your friend, Mark

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