Love Of Basketball

Haiku: 3|5|3 Love of Basketball

Let’s play ball
Gym class on the court
Foot in cast

— Barbara Writes, Feb 02, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

weirdelf

18 years 5 months ago

I apologise for the low vote

A vote of one means to me it needs a lot more. What are you really trying to say? Most of us had had sports injuries but what were your feelings? Could you have been a contender? Should gym classes be safer? Is it a metaphor for trying your best and getting hurt? Gimme more, please cheers, Jess

Barbara Writes

18 years 5 months ago

no none of that

My fifteen year old is in a cast my brother in law two nephews are in cast all happen in last two month just writing because injuries are part of life. No special meaning of concern pro or con. Didn't mean to offend. Will revise.

weirdelf

18 years 5 months ago

LOL (or at least a big grin)

No offense taken. I can be blunt in my comments but never try to be hurtful. Good luck on the re-write. cheers, Jess

Barbara Writes

18 years 5 months ago

Blunt dosen't bother me

I like knowing when what I say or write may be misunderstood by other. Hope it makes a better communicator and writer. I tend to have an sensitive conscience.

whitetea

18 years 2 months ago

>

I am beginning to value Brevity more and more.

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks Whitetea

Smiles:) Barbara I like brief too, then I can be a little to brief at time Appreciate you reading and commenting. Your comment remind me to take a look at this again. haiku is brief, thinking about making it that instead.

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