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all sad and alone

when you're gone my world will drop and time will stop.angels cry over your soul when it time for you to go. i wouder why you had to leave me all sad and alone.im still woundering when you going to come home.im felling so sad and alone.baby please come back home where you belong so i wont be all sad and alone.one last cry befor my day dies.i can't do nothing now but sit here and cry woundering why my life had to drop down and die.i dont know why i feel this why but let shair one last cry befor our day die

— Angel, Feb 01, 2008

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Country/Region: SC

Favorite Poets: Langston Hughes, Gwendolyn Brooks, Maya Angelou, 2pac

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poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

stanzas please

The concept of the poem is not uncommon loss and loneliness but your words could have been though out better to many cliche's also please use stanzas or doublets ( two line segments) makes your work easier to read and lastly there is a nice little feature on this site it is the spell check I use it all of the time I welcome you to neopoet and at anytime to discuss your work with me and apologize if you feel I was harsh Chrys