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A Dog's Last Journey--Revised.

Limping down the road, hungry and cold,

The dog whimpered, not knowing she was old,

Nor did she know that the man she loved,

Was trying to send her to Heaven above.

 

The old dog had cancer, and her head would ache,

She shivered and found that it was hard to stay awake,

She lay down at last ,still fighting the pain,

And thought of the warm house as it started to rain.

 

The dog had been true and had loved the man

Who knew his dog was worth more than His plans,

He turned and drove back to help his old friend,

And found her fighting the pain clear to the end.

 

He picked up his dog and stroked the gray head,

Then drove his friend home and placed her in bed,

Turned on some soft music and gazed long at his pet,

Then with hot tears of sorrow took her straight to the vet.

 

He held his friend tightly as the vet gave the last shot,

The dog licked her friend's hand as Her world became dark.

— Patthepoet, Dec 31, 2007

Critiques

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purplemoondoll

18 years 7 months ago

Written with compassion

This is so sad. Written with compassion. You told the story well. I was not too sure about the last two lines breaking the rhyming scheme - but reading it again I think it works. Best wishes Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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Patthepoet

18 years 7 months ago

Review on "A Dog's Last Journey"

Thanks much. This poem was written after reading another poem that said a man kicked his dog "just because he could". After reading this and being a strong advocate for dogs, this poem just came. It has been revised as I said before. Again, I thank you for the lovely review.
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dkelly

18 years 7 months ago

A Dog's Last Journey

I just wanted to let you know Patthepoet, this is such a beautiful work. It brought tears to my eyes...I lost a longtime pet last summer, I also had to watch the needle and comfort him, (my cat, BJ, 16 yrs old), while he took his last breath. A bigger heartbreak I have never known. Nothing, absolutely nothing, would I alter in this poem. Blessings... Deborah :o))
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Patthepoet

18 years 6 months ago

Reply to review of my poem.

Thanks very much for the lovely review. I have lost many pets, both dogs And cats. I appreciate your understanding. Thanks.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 6 months ago

A Dog's Last Journey

This was a beautiful poem It so reminded me of my last dog we had to put to sleep It really touched my heart, nicely done! I cried also.
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Patthepoet

18 years 6 months ago

Reply to review.

Thanks for the beautiful review. I have had two dogs that lived long, but finally had to be put to sleep. The first one- Lassie- lived almost fifteen years but had a stroke and was paralyzed. The other one was Lady, our Sheltie who was almost fifteen and passed away in sleep. I appreciate the kind words in your review. Thanks. Pat.

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