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soulless terrible

 

 

 

out of the heaving overhead

landing like dry kisses

on my hot forehead

beautiful crystals of snow

 

I want to reach up

and be torn from this earthbound

existance

ejected through airless space

travel forever

a speck of nothing

past rotting fires of exploded

stars

gasses billowed out

ejected in green STARBRIGHT

colours

spools of galaxies tilting

littering the coal darkness

like bright polished

thoughts

 

I'm cold and frozen

laying here

no one knows

no one cares

 

snow drifts down

forever

and they melt

like tears

 

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— orgami, Dec 24, 2007

Critiques

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sunnyhill

18 years 7 months ago

soulless terrible

Orgami, maybe I don't know a lot about snow [hardly ever does at home] but it resonates,and more than that, it took me into outer space. thanks for the journey
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Patthepoet

18 years 7 months ago

"Soulless terrible review

Your imagery is excellent. I could see the stars and galaxies exploding and feel that horrible, biting cold of outer space. I've always thought a trip to the moon or mars would be fun. Maybe my next lifetime. Anyway, I enjoyed your poem very much. Even read it through twice. Thanks much for sharing. Pat
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 7 months ago

Some great lines...

like bright polished thoughts...there is a passion in your writing, glad to read this one...

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