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ellisville
Dec 10, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

UNDER MY UMBRELLA

you can come.

you too can come.

your heart ,pour to me;

yourself, free from these worries.

 

You can be under my umbrella.

life's rain remembers

that i am ones sunshine,

and that i would surely see my bride.

so stay under my covers.

it won't rain on you,

i have got rain made coat shoes.

you can put me on.

— ellisville, Dec 10, 2007
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meic

18 years 7 months ago

A nicely-worked and

A nicely-worked and carefully worded symbol of care and protection. Iechyd da [Good Health - Welsh] Mike
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 7 months ago

Yes, modern women often resent the offer of protection

But they usually actually love it. The antagonism between you and me stemmed from your poem "Abortion", which I still find highly offensive, but I acknowledge I have been intolerant of cultural differences. You show here and in other works that you are a sensitive, caring and talented poet. cheers, Jess

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