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whitetea
whitetea
Nov 21, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I gave you a seashell

There was something in the way you used to tell it
            it was new and pealed,
                        it had always been waiting

 this balance is
        one that will find a tightrope.  

There was something in the way
        I used to hear,
    I would sit on the porch.

                theres a dream
                that fits like  a broken reel

                where I got to find an
    edge    and a tool
            before there is no coil.

 
— whitetea, Nov 21, 2007

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Chrystos, Mark Strand, Adrienne Rich, Naomi Shihab Nye, Rachel M. Simon, Donald Justice, Mary Oliver, Nikki Giovanni, Alice Walker, Bukowski, Mary Lambert

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 6 months ago

I somehow get the feeling

I somehow get the feeling the title should be "You Gave Me A Seashell" The last lines confuse me a bit, are you trying to find the beginning and end of the coil in a seashell? Perhaps you are ironically referring to the futility of finding beginnings and ends? Don't quite understand this piece (perhaps I do perfectly) but I like it, it intrigues me. cheers, Jess p.s. don't know any of the poets you refer to in your profile but intend to look them up.