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Lost in a World (A Quatrain)

 

Lost in a World

 

I feel lost in a world that no longer cares,

wondering if anything matters, only plow shares,

wondering what brought us to this precipice now,

wondering, wondering the more, should I have a cow?

 

My anger has subsided as I've seen way too much,

wondering how to overcome apathy born as such,

wondering who will break this evil spell come over us,

wondering, wondering the more, where is the back of the bus?

 

My heart sinks in sadness, I've surely lost my way,

wondering where all the flowers have gone in the fray,

wondering why eagles still soar in the clouds high above,

wondering, wondering the more, where has gone all the love?

 

My head is pounding, my heart is aching, grieving for my loss,

wondering how much pain I must suffer before shooting this ol' hoss,

wondering if time has passed me by, spaced out in the devil's hand,

wondering, wondering the more, how do I beat this dark, evil band?

 

Is it all in my head, and does it really matter a whit,

no more wondering, no more waiting as I write while I sit,

no more wondering of who, what, when and, maybe, somewhere,

no more wondering, wondering the more, now who but I must care?

 

It's just you and me, babe, no one else matters! (Wink!)

— Ancientone, Nov 04, 2007

Critiques

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cricket

18 years 8 months ago

Loved It

very nice Patrick, wondering is something I do alot of lately, and this poem really brought that to lite in a way that I can't describe, well written, the title is perfect for the poem. your words painted quite a picture in my mind. and I really could relate to ur words. wonderfully written, with alot of emotion felt. by the way I was wondering, jk. hugz.
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Ancientone

18 years 8 months ago

Thanks....

Cricket, have a good evening. Patrick/AO
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dbrock

18 years 8 months ago

…sadly, this just about

...sadly, this just about sums up the world today. I share the sentiments & very much enjoyed the read. Hugz, donna
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Ancientone

18 years 8 months ago

Hugz....

back to you Donna! I see you live in MO, will e-mail you, I used to live in the St. Louis area. Thanks for adding me to your buddy list. I will add you as well dear lady! Of mind and spirit we journey, crossing paths once in a while and as in the old oft qouted prayer goes, for a reason, a season or a lifetime. Here's to better friends for as long as life allows. Have a great day poet friend. :) Patrick/AO

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