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JLK

This is the moment That I can see That you are beautiful And you mean everything to me You are strong And you are weak But if you love me There is nothing you can’t beat   When I stand I always fall But with you I am balanced perfectly You pick me up Put me on both feet And you are beautiful And you mean everything to me   I am starting to believe that You and I could achieve what The greatest of love has done- And everyone is staring at Everything our love has won-   This is the moment Of the day Where I can see that I love you in everyway I can’t stand To be away But when I am with you Everything is in its place   You are strong And I am weak But I love you And I know that you love me And you are beautiful And you mean everything to me   I am starting to believe that You and i could achieve what The greatest of love has done And everyone is staring at Everything our love has won-   This is the moment That i know That there is so much more love that i dont show And you are strong And i am weak You are beautiful And you are everything to me
— A. M. Painter, Nov 01, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

Great news!

I wish I believed you, then you might put some of your undoubted poetic ability to more generous or profound use. cheers, Jess
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years 3 months ago

had to stop in on this one...

...as JLK will be my initials soon when I get married - scary, huh? If y'all were still together, I'd say this was a beautiful tribute. Nice write, regardless. ~Lynn (Dwarfie) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Bush is listening.... use big words!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine..."

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