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O

tarnished expression

 

 

you live in this simple world

of backwards illusion

foggy and cracked in your corner

come meet with me

again

 

when the sun is sharply

setting and the light is

just  so

i can see the halfway of you

looking out once more again

 

the eyes so circular and haunted

the years have drawn you down

the bones of so many

others have

come and gone

 

..O..

— orgami, Oct 31, 2007

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dbrock

18 years 9 months ago

tarnished expression

I really like this...reminds me of someone I know. Well done, I enjoyed the read! dbrock

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