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The True Officer

The True Officer

 

Yellow sands of the desert we swallow you in the evening,

We taste you at lunchtime; we eat you in the morning,

We inhale you in the night-

We cough and we gasp.

We long for a fast death without any pain

An officer in a tent, he clings to his pencil and writes

He writes in the deserts night to his children

-I will be home for Christmas-

 

He writes it and then leaves the tent all alone

And he watches the same golden moon

He calls for his soldiers and he cleans his weapon

And he orders the next deadly attack

Then he concedes the soldiers to dance. 

 

Yellow sands of the desert we swallow you in the evening,

We taste you at lunchtime; we eat you in the morning,

We inhale you in the night-

We cough and we gasp.

We long for a fast death without any pain.

An officer in a tent, he clings to his pencil and writes

He writes in the deserts night to his children

-I will be home for Christmas-

 

He gets drunk and he celebrates

Lets the soldiers clean the tanks

And the music is gentle playing

Before their last fight to death 

 

Yellow sands of the desert we swallow you in the evening,

We taste you at lunchtime; we eat you in the morning,

We inhale you in the night-

We cough and we gasp.

An officer in a tent, he clings to his pencil and writes

The diary of his first real war

About the weapons so deadly

And the collateral damages of the day

He writes in the deserts night to his children

-I will be home for Christmas-

 

An impact in the dessert only few miles away

And ten guards die from hostile fire

The music fades into a cry

While the officer in his tent dreams from victory

And he smiles-

 

 

Yellow sands of the desert we swallow you in the evening,

We taste you at lunchtime; we eat you in the morning,

We inhale you in the night-

We cough and we gasp.

An officer in a tent, he clings to his pencil and writes

The diary of his first real war

About the weapons so deadly

And the collateral damages of the day

About careless unable soldiers

And his innocent and pure conscience

He writes in the deserts night to his children

-I will be home for Christmas-

 

 

— Demokrit, Oct 12, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

And of course he won't be home for Christmas

I don't know if you are are a veteran, or in active service or writing compassionate fiction. But I feel for American soldiers. You know, one of the few things agreed upon amongst the disparate Australian anti-war movement was not to attack the soldiers. They are being sent to die for oil greed. Everyone knows that Hussein and the Taliban are not the worst evils. Several other dictators and cases of genocide are much worse (give me time and I will give you the names and places). But they don't attract Americas attention or intervention because there is no profit in it. American soldiers have my sympathy. But they would have much more if they simply refused to go. cheers, Jess
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Demokrit

18 years 9 months ago

Thank you for your wonderful

Thank you for your wonderful comment. I was born and live in Germany-I am a woman and educate my children to not become soldiers. I am writing about what I see and feel persons perhaps do think. Each soldier is in my heart and I adore them if they have a reason for a war- otherwise they should stay where they belong to and this is at home with their family-oil is no reason for any war-no resource is worth a war... thank you and bless you for reading my poetry
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 9 months ago

Sniff...

State Side Vet. Gulf War,then came another Bush,and the former Secretary of Defense is the vice president . One friend left without the feeling in his back and buttocks is too many. In ink, David

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