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On Notice
Fads last to first, becoming best to worst
Pretty seems to lack a lasting appeal
All bets are off from the very first deal
Finding the trailing army of 'one more thing'
Side by side the crowning of the'get paid king'
You're on notice I noticed bad behavior
You're on notice I've noted your new savior
Terms lock a few, look the other way too
Bought stuff despite lack of good looks
Paid for my prayers and all my books
Under siege self indulgers, dark painful plea
Found one corporate place weak, low care algae
You're on notice I noticed bad behavior
You're on notice I've noted your new savior
Hearts die when thrown, for a lesser unknown
Genuine plummet at the close of the bell
Mind weighing don't buy, heart saying what the hell
Landmarks just north of town, some pattern wheel fell
Doo Drop Inn long been a source, of someone's hell
You're on notice I noticed bad behavior
You're on notice I've noted your new savior
Order while these souls woefully loiter
Angels cry out for a parallel voice
Usual suspects have forgone their choice
Critiques
weirdelf
18 years 9 months ago
I love this!
DDCdogood
18 years 9 months ago
The Stumbling and Slowing Niggles of DDC 'Longsentence':)
weirdelf
18 years 9 months ago
Yes, definite improvement.
DDCdogood
18 years 9 months ago
The Failing of the Obvious
LovelArt
18 years 9 months ago
Wow!
purplemoondoll
18 years 9 months ago
Heart Saying what the hell
Jillian Botha
18 years 9 months ago
As always with what i have read previously...
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