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Back To Sand

day begins for all to see
visionary, visionary
crazy though as it may seem
many lost in still born dreams

heavy ships all filled with glee
docked in shameless luxury
the albertross, our great white cloud
must we still wear the tattered shroud

pasture grounds of wheat and maze
fodder for their glory day’s
against the face of all our peers
a history of fear, blood, and tears

this arrow sent from hand of plead
did you ever, lap a dog, so bred of need
growling at your breast of greed

party faith of bigger dreams
threshing floor of ill run schemes
a pathway, for the bird of prey
must we close our eyes and say, go away

sleight of hand concealing truth
food of anger, hungry youth
and when they bring the curtain down
we’ll all wear the revolution, like a frown,
upside down clowns

so bite the hand last suppers host
help to scare this evil ghost
golden calves of this our land
must we turn man back, back to sand
(c) s.watts

— WingTip, Oct 08, 2007

Critiques

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WingTip

18 years 9 months ago

poetry.com ? Flattery or Genuine ?

I hope this site isn't anything to do with poetry.com I feel that poetry.com is a "Flattery Marketing" site and frequently get told that i have been chosen for an award or suchlike and then they ask me to buy a book. Does any one know any one who has actualy recieved an award or certificate from these people without buying a book?
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 9 months ago

What a read.

'lap a dog,so bred of need' From beginning to well timed end. 'Threshing floor of ill run schemes' None of that here at neopoet and such a good job they do of keeping it that way. I'll be tuned to you poet. In ink, David
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

But not on this one.

I just love it, would dig to hear it performed live. The last line is a killer and makes sense of the storm of images that precedes it. I almost asked for a stanza break, so I could catch my breath, but it would spoil the torrential effect. cheers, Jess
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WingTip

18 years 9 months ago

Back To Sand -Recited

Thanks for your feedback on my poem If you like, i can send you an mp3 of Back To Sand Recited by ex-Rdio 2 DJ Jonathan Hewat!

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