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tee4eva921
Sep 30, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

The Agony Of A Toothache

Times get rough when your in pain

Agonozing discomfort can drive you insane

Thats how i feel

What should I do?

A toothache from hell

Purple and blue

A dentist I need

No insurance I have

Nothing can be done with the money I have

Antibiotics to pain killers

Dosent always seem to work

For temporarily it does,

Then right back to hurt

I cant take this mess..

Im tired, Im done

Sometimes i feel the toothache has won

The pain that it brought me drove me to tears

I ben going through this mess going on some years

Im tired of crying, sick of the stress

Sick of it all, Tired of this mess

I have to get it pulled

The only way to be free

The agony of a toothache

Got the best of me>

 

— tee4eva921, Sep 30, 2007
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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

oh yes, I know this

But you know what's missing? Unless you are much more of a saint than me (wouldn't be hard) I forget that the constant pain is what's making me such a cranky a*hole, the way it affects my view of the world. I think some of that perspective could add depth to this work. Or perhaps you are a saint. 8) cheers, Jess
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 10 months ago

welcome to Neopoet...

To show that which is common (I get ear infections)One small spelling Pixie (ben) and Ouch what a poem.Soon when the tooth comes out this will be ba funny reminder.With Wisdom teeth,it is best to have none. I hope you enjoy reading and posting on Neopoet a little cafe in the electronic umbra.Pull up a cup of your favorite blend and listen and share the uno-verse. In ink, Dabbbler
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 10 months ago

Good...

I like the fact that it isn't a common theme; i.e. love, or equivilent...Keep posting, look foward to seeing more of your work:) Frost
JB

Jillian Botha

18 years 10 months ago

I liked thisone. Can it be interpreted as something deeper...?

Hi Tee4eva This was a good write for me (i was actually holding my jaw feeling that darn toothache!!!) I couldn't help but get the feeling that yes this is about a damn sore toothache, but correct me please if i am wrong is there a deeper underlying pain to this write? Thank you for this, i will definitely be an avid reader of your work in the near future!!! kind regards Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

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