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CruelBrutalRuthlessVicious School DayZ

Laughed and made fun of you. Just for the hell of it. Got a vast SniggerGiggleCackle. Rest of the replicas united with me. Did we make you feel diminutive? Did we make you feel EmptyWorthlessHollow? Every hour on the hour we sought you out. Pushing my words in your face. Never do you dare challenge me. Taking my beatings to heart. Holding your RageFuryWrath under your tongue. Hours ticking away. Holding my fate in your silver bullets. Not knowing what may come of me. Waltz thru the doors like every other StandardTypicalNatural day. You rise to my DareTestUltimatum. Without my awareness. You pull the trigger. Dreary silver bullets fly thru the air. Pushing themselves into the carbon copies that surround me. Specks of blood slap me in the face. People run past me. All I see is you. Stopped in time. Holding your gun to my forehead. Our eyes connect for a moment. Screams are echoing thru the halls. Silent it all becomes. You GentlyTenderlyQuietly say I LOVE YOU. As quick as speeding light you take your own life. Stains of you rest on my face. Unknown faces surround us. Holding you close to me. She takes you from my arms. Lay you in a black bag and take you away. Confusion written on my face. Every thing standing at a REST.

— RandomThoughts, Sep 26, 2007

Critiques

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RandomThoughts

18 years 10 months ago

YES!!

Hahaha thats awesome.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 10 months ago

You blur the image as I (shudder)

Imagine this would play out in the minds of the protaginist,i have been the misfit the butt of the joke and had my moments of revenge all to get me where I am today.Leavbe and let be til harm befalls the innocent and defensless then it is to the purpatrators demise. Intresting Idea try to write it Visa versa,a challenge to you Random,i'll stay tuned. In ink, no box

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