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LIES!!!!!!!!

My heart is full of lies, but I try to keep it from getting told so many lies, yet you think you found that right nigga and what happen you don’t give a damn thing about a kiss but yet later you find out he playing you so you get told that an mess you up so you think to yourself what the hell did I d0 wrong this time?, but it had me thinking bout my past um-mm what goes around come back around right? , but not knowing at this time  you really thinking damn how can I get him back but also you said that you don’t want to get told so many lies right? you try to gain all that love but what happen you find it very hard to overcome all that pain so you tell yourself to go back to all that pain but you say I don’t want to be hurt anymore but you don’t want to be the one alone or hurt so if you going   back to all your war with him making you happy then meaning you like getting lied to right? You say you want so much but only get 50% of what you want right? So you ask yourself am I hurting myself if  I go back but u thinking no I’m not  but really  when you are but u dying  to be with him why cause he make you so happy so go back and all  your lies will stay there and that no lie!!!!!

 

— charlawndra, Sep 17, 2007

Critiques

Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 10 months ago

Welcome...

Welcome to the site, Look foward to seeing more of your work, this seems more like a blog entry.
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Bosspoet

18 years 10 months ago

Love can't live with it or without it

Its good but try to have a rhyming sequence to me it helps keep your reader attention. Example:(Because he constantly tells me lies, my heart gives way for the fear inside).Just an example I know that doesnt make much since but just an example of a rhyming sequence. Write another one and submit it I can't wait to read it!
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charlawndra

18 years 10 months ago

thankzzz

ooooh thankz for ur comments

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