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The Pain of the Street

The concrete jungle is my home

This cardboard box, my shelter from the storm.

I never I thought my life would be like this

Never thought I’d deviate so far from the norm.

 

You avoid my gaze, you look through me

You pretend I don’t exist.

My being homeless makes you uncomfortable

You swear, you would never live like this.

 

Food and shelter, you take them for granted

Once apon a time, so did I.

I used to have a job and a home and a family

I lost them all, once I started getting high.

 

My drug of choice was cocaine

A wicked taskmaster is she.

A Twisted domineering mistress

I am but a shell of the man, I used to be.

 

The cold hard sidewalk is unforgiving

The streets are filled with crime.

I beg like a dog, for a scrap of food

Because I don’t have a dog gone dime.

 

I try not to look in mirrors

I don’t like the image I see

I avoid my reflection in windows

A pathetic old mans looking back at me.

 

I pray that in Gods Kingdom

There’s a new home waiting for me.

One where there is no hunger

No pain, and no poverty.

— bellavistabear, Aug 28, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

Bear is this a very different departure from the our work you

expresed so far. Your present "larger than life" usualy, and have My deepest repects. You have changed my mind about poetry as entertainment. I have said I like you and this is very different. Your tough Rebublic gun-toter has give in us generously of your vulnerabilty and your deep sensitivy. My utter repect. cheers, Jess
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bellavistabear

18 years 11 months ago

I'm honored!

Jess, Wow...your gonna make me blush! Thanks for your feedback, I'm honored that you took the time to stop in, and flattered by your response. Not to worry, I'm sure I'll submit something soon that will make you grate your teeth...LOL! Thanks again, Brian (bellavistabear)

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