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I am like a thin glass
full of water.
When you are thirsty
I will replenish you.
When your throat is dry
And you find it hard to speak
I will help you.
When you need me
I am there.
But if you drop me
I will shatter.
And I will cut you open.
Leaving scars all over.
So you will never forget.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
Not sure what to use for a title. Any ideas? Criticism? Advice?
Editing stage:
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Rula
Sat, 2018-12-08 01:55
First of all
Welcome to Neopoet. Hope you stick around and enjoy it.
I think" who am I" would be a good title.
Thank you for sharing!
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themoonman
Fri, 2018-12-07 20:46
Hi,
The first thing that comes to mind
is "Handle with care", although it is
cliche, it totally fits the content.
Welcome to the site ... thanks for
posting with us.
poem.er
Thu, 2018-12-13 06:30
Thank you
Thank you so much. Both of those titles are awesome ideas. I appreciate the warm welcome as well.
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