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Naive not foolish (((((Advised by Rula again
To Sirs with love
My teachers
all were not so unkind to me
they said that I was
naive
whereas
they meant
innocent,
gullible,
but not silly
all of them
all the time
teachers, if you want to befriend students
tell them where they are really weak...
my sister was a teacher too
a mathematical dunce,
she called me
that alone made me to prove
how wrong was she
neither
naive nor silly me
but I remember her still
for the glee
and
love she finally gave me
I alone attended
her dissolution
into space
from where we all came
and
must return
I can still see her
smile at me....
not
silly
but
naive...
nice, I have now learned
I wasn't foolish enough
my teary eyes
have now discerned
Style / type:
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Comments
Rula
Tue, 2015-10-06 01:17
hello Loved
I thought you've hit the nail with this. I thought you've raised a good point here for teachers and educators, parents and everyone who might have the chance to raise a child or has to teach him/her.
But I thought naivety is a bit different than foolishness in one way or another. There is nothing wrong to be naïve or easy going people. I believe it's a trait that helps the person live longer and be a friend of many people.
As I said, this has a message that I appreciate a lot both as a former teacher and as a reader.
Thank you!!
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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lovedly
Tue, 2015-10-06 20:39
thanks for the mention Rula
you raise my morale
wait till i google
and get back naive
what tis
lovedly
Tue, 2015-10-06 21:12
thanks Rula 4 ur lovely inspiring words
without you
I would have still been
in the blues
nice
I am now relieved
Rula
Wed, 2015-10-07 00:19
Hello Loved
nice to know that the suggestion was in a way helpful. It was just a thought, you could have discarded any way,
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lovedly
Wed, 2015-10-07 02:08
no ....not at all
we are here to learn after all
and Rula ur kind to me
I have seen regards
Sparrow
Wed, 2015-10-07 03:36
Loved
You seem to be asking for forgiveness and at the same time saying I told you so but I guess it was as usual left a little late, as your time didn't seem to give you a chance.
Life young Bard is so full of regrets from many people especially family.
Our family is so precious and we most times take it for granted until there in that allotted time there is a space we cannot fill.
Never fear young Bard, those that have gone ahead are watching over us each day, just ask and you will hear them in the distance,
Yours Ian..
.
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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
lovedly
Wed, 2015-10-07 13:49
Thanx friend philosopher and guide
we upon friendly shoulders
always ride
lovedly
Sun, 2015-10-18 22:29
lessons learned
remember
Yul Bryner ..
he said
MAN IS BORN LIVES AND DIES ALONE
AMEN
alidzain
Sun, 2015-10-18 15:58
Ioved
I concur with the others.
Alid
lovedly
Sun, 2015-10-18 14:44
cocur??
cocur??
did u miss a K?
I Wonder