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"Erotic Class" Alternate erotic edit

I had posted my erotic post yesterday but before I posted it.I had help from our resident Warrior Princess, after much thought and consideration I went with my original version with some little tweeks to smooth it out, but Xena had took the time and written an alternate version of my post.I like this version very much, so I figured I would share it, to show how two poets can take the same piece and both come up with something great.I hope you all enjoy this, I sure did.And I would also like to give Rosi a big time thanks for her time and effort.Thank you Rosi:-)

"Erotic Class"

To slide inside, feel the warm wet
the touch of your skin, I’ll never forget.

Your hips sway, and welt your ass
pounding like a hammer, erotic, but class.

Lost in your body, drowning in your lust
to discover you all over, to nibble, I must.

I travel your legs, beyond your knees.
between thighs, you aim to please.

Your mouth, and the things it can do
have trust in mine, my flickering tongue too.

Your nails gash deep, it hurts so good
I’ll scratch back, like a bear in the wood.

You kiss me softly; with that look in your eyes
I kneel before you, and the wolf man cries.

We taste each other our satisfaction is pending.
as we finish, our moans are surrendering.

As the moon falls lower, and this night is done
we still have tomorrow, since we’ve barely begun.

Comments

It appears as temperatures rise so does libido lol. Bet you and Rosi had a blast writing this..............scribbler

I could't even imagine doing a collaboration with this type of poem, I would probably be far too shy.I imagine that it would be a blast though, lol.

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author comment

This write deserved to be shared Rosi:-)

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"For what is it to die, But to stand in the sun and melt into the wind?"

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I will write such an erotica for you
That you will both burst
Without as much as a thrust
Nor touch
Of that i have the panacea
And as you two flow
The sun will stop to show
From where to where
Your juices could flow.
Where to flower!
But promise me,
My lust
Thou shalt not deflower>...................

loved

Eroticised

Thanks for the toooooooooooooo
I thought
You would have said
Only loved
Uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
Can
Dooooooooooooooo

Shall...

Let the night ungown itself,
Let the snows melt away,
Then we shall see who is...
Drenched more you than ye,
You perhaps can forget me
In the hours torn apart
The legs we climb
I remain sublime
And
Tongue to toe
My mouth does blow

Wow you can say now,
Wow you won't

For some more of the liqueur
Needs to flow,
From where we cum
And
To where we go...
Yet wait...
Albeit!

loved

Sometimes its nice to step outside our comfort zones, and throw caution to the wind.I somehow have trouble believing that your shy though.I can be quite shy also but when I feel that way I force myself ahead now a days, unlike when I was younger.

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"For what is it to die, But to stand in the sun and melt into the wind?"

author comment

Kudos to you both! My favorite lines are:

You kiss me softly; with that look in your eyes
I kneel before you, and the wolf man cries.

We taste each other our satisfaction is pending.
as we finish, our moans are surrendering.

As the moon falls lower, and this night is done
we still have tomorrow, since we’ve barely begun.

absolutely astounding! Thanks for sharing!

always, Cat

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