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The Terrible Consequences of Sin Play Dramatic Verse

Play dramatic Verse The Terrible Consequences of Sin
Characters—Adam, Eve/Woman, Voice of God, Angel with him, Cherub,

Archangel—in the Garden of Eden

In the garden of Eden
Adam and Eve had it all
a paradise home, no lease
countless fruit trees to feast
animals they subdued short, tall, big and small.

Now the serpent
more cautious than all the animals
approached the woman in
a private conversation.

Serpent—did you notice the tree
in the middle of the garden?

Woman—yes, God said we should not eat
from it otherwise we die.

Serpent—you will not die
for God knows if you eat
you will become like him.

Archangel—the woman was thoroughly deceived, thus she ate.

Adam—woman, this thing you are doing
is disobedience to our God
all the fruits in the garden
he gave us to eat, but
the fruit in the middle of the garden
he had said no or we will die.
Woman—the serpent said we would not die
for God knows if we eat our eyes will be opened
we'll be like Him knowing good and bad
take a bite it is really good.

Archangel—saddened by the woman's actions Adam talks silently to himself
Adam—the woman God gave me has eaten
the fruit God forbade, she will surely die
If I eat with her, we will both die
our unborn children, they too will die.

hmmmm, the tree of life in the east of the garden
God said, those eating from it shall never die but, live forever.

Archangel—Eve interrupted Adam's thoughts
Woman—it is really good, take a bite and see.

Archangel—Adam leans over and takes a bite, speaks silently to hisself
Adam—(Crunch) yum yum
the tree of life I shall eat
and we both will live
for God has said, any who eat from it
shall live forever.

Archangel—(Surprised) his eyes are opened
Adam—woman, you are naked
Woman—you too is naked Adam.

Adam—take these fig leaves
let's twine them to cover ourselves.  

Archangel—when God walked about in the garden in the breezy part of the day He called out to Adam

Voice of God—(thunderous) Adam!

Adam—God is calling us
Woman—what will we do? for we are naked
Adam—come, let's hide behind these trees from the face of God.

Voice of God—(thunderous) Adam!

Adam—here I am! I heard your voice in the garden
I was afraid to approach your face
for I am naked.

Voice of God—(thunderous) Adam! who told you that
you were naked?
Did you eat from the tree I commanded you not too?

Adam—the woman YOU gave me
gave me the fruit and I did eat.

Voice of God—(thunderous) woman! what is this you have done?

Woman—the SERPENT deceived me and I did eat.

Voice of God—(thunderous) serpent! because you have done this, cursed you are among all domestic animals in the field.

on your belly you will go , you will eat dust all the days of your life.

Voice of God—(thunderous) woman! your pain in childbirth will be increased
you will long for your husband and he will dominate you.

Voice of God—Adam! because you listened to your wife's voice and ate from the tree I commanded you not too,
you have been banished from the Garden of Eden in which you came
take your wife, outside you will reside in the ground that has been curse on your account.

in pain you will eat its produce
thorns and thistles will grow for you in the field vegetation you will eat in the sweat of your face
you will eat bread until you return to the ground in which you were taken
from dust you are and dust you will return.

Archangel—the human race had a tragic start
Adam forfeited paradise for all mankind
joy, peace, security and happiness
has been lost.

earth, a place of sin, suffering and death
Adam acquired for his offspring
the consequences of sin is death.

Archangel—Adam speaks to the woman

Adam—you are the mother of all living, I will call you Eve
take this long garment God made from skin to clothe us.

Archangel—God spoke to me in the heavens beside him

Voice of God—look my only begotten, the man has become like one of us knowing good and bad.

Archangel—Adam has been expelled from the Garden of Eden to cultivate the ground from which he came, God spoke to another of his angels, a Cherub

Voice of God—Cherub! go to the east of the garden
take this flaming sword and turn it continuously
guard the way to the tree of life.

lest Adam put out his hand and take of the fruit of life also
lest he eat and live forever.

Archangel—Adam reflected on his life

Adam—My first son Cain
murder my second son Abel

I've witnessed the abuse of God's marital arrangement
have witnessed his sacred name profaned
I have watched a city build
seen musical instruments artfully developed forging tools from iron and copper
and my condemnation by the example of Enoch.
Enoch is the seventh in my generation
he walked with the true God when I did not
I also lived to see the father of Noah, Lameech
the ninth in my generation, begat Noah.

Adam—930 years later, I have seen the good and bad just as the serpent said
casting doubt on God's integrity and sovereignty
a liar and slanderer satan became, for I am dying.
my spirit, the life God breathed into my nostrils returns as I die this very day.

Archangel—Adam returned to the ground in which he was taken in 3096 B.C.E. just as God said Genesis 3:1-24 The End.


I once started writing about Adam and Eve when Mr. Wesley pointed outthat you have to add your touch when a story is told before.
I thought you've done a good job here. Some proof reading and Barbara's megical touch then a good story in verse is ready to be read. :)
Thank you for sharing.


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Thanks I appreciate your comment. I'd hope it would have my touch fresh to make it capture the attention of the reader from beginning to end.

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This should have the workshop label so that we can accept it as a progressive poem in Wesley's workshop..
An excellent write on a very hard subject, it flowed well and would make a good play.
Take care, yours,

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Okay I put it back there
Thanks for the input.

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As far as it is possible for me to ignore said content based on highly suspicious bronze-age misogynist, outdated superstition (have you even read the evil atrocity that is called the Old Testament or the sexist writings of Paul?) No, it's not possible for me. Been there, done that, don't need more unless the ending is something like "So that can all be forgotten, I will think for myself"

What I read was well written. An ambitious project and I applaud your courage.

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human cave painting have recently been found from about 12,000 BCE.
The fossil record is reasonable accurate.
The physics models of creation based on Big Bang are supported by evidence and tested predictions.

Because I care about you so much it makes it all the more appalling to me that a women of your strength, courage and intellect would be so wilfully ignorant as to believe this nonsense.

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Thanks for reading and sharing.
And to hear it was well written was a joy to hear you say considering your view of the subject itself. Yes I've read the bible from beginning to end more times than I can remember in count. I always learn something new when I start back at genesis to revelation.
Big Bang theory is just that's theory. I've watched the segment of evolution in it entirety couple of time. I believe in the evolving part of the earth and planet. I completely differ in man evolution from monkeys over time. I believe man was created from an intelligent being not from a Big Bang experiment.

"There is no reason for a pot of soup to start boiling unless someone turn on the heat. " I'm intelligent you're intelligent physics and creation interest me. To believe all this start from nothing intelligent is ignorant.

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It proves ignorance. Gravity is still "just a theory". Prove it absolutely? No you can't because it doesn't seem to work in some situations but the Theory of Gravity explains why.

Watch and read a bit more. We didn't evolve "from" monkeys, our evolutionary path diverted at some point. Some became various forms of monkey, some became human. Look at all the various breeds of dog, that all originally came from wolf. When you look in the eyes of an Orang Otang, Barbara, can you really deny some cognitive empathy? The fact that bacteria evolve quickly to become antibiotic resistant shows in a quick time scale that evolution is true.

What you personally believe is your choice, even if it goes against all scientific evidence, you have the right to be wilfully ignorant.

To believe in an entity starting it in the first place, like a child lighting the wick on a cracker and running away, is understandable, because we have very little real knowledge beyond speculation about all the Big Bangs happening everywhere.

To think that that naughty child actually hang around and watches us and especially intervenes in our lives is just silly. The good get rewarded, or punished, the bad get rewarded, or punished. Only by limiting your intelligence can you believe in an interventionist god.

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Scientists come up with ideas that fit their thinking process. Diverted at some point? Something diverted it or simply created it from intelligence not bc intelligence just happen by chance. Gravity is absolute, just because you can't prove it absolutely don't mean it's a unproven theory. Whoever cause this unexplained phenomenon has to be more intelligent than it.. Because I know who God is, conscience and gravity makes sense though hard to explain.. I look through spiritual eyes and physical eyes. So everything don't need to be tangible for me to see it clearly. I believe in evolution. Everything evolve over the years. I see that clearly through physical eyes. I just don't think intelligence evolve from non intelligence. Nature shows that.

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Nothing is ever absolutely proven, least of all god. Scientists come up with ideas, test them and reject them if they don't match the evidence.
Do not tell lies Barbara, it is beneath you. As much as I or anyone might attack your faith it is yours and no-one can take it away from you. But don't tell lies to justify it. It is pretty much the definition of faith, that it can't be proven.

Nature does not show that intelligence can't evolve from non-intelligence. It shows the opposite, all animals show some degree of intelligence. Once again you are lying, please don't do that to me, I would never do it to you.

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Human intellect is different from animal. . I didn't say nature prove that. I said nature shows intelligent creator exist. We create intelligent things so why can't an intelligent creature create us from earth elements and not a Big Bang theory that started from some non intelligent recipe that just happen at some climax. Our intelligence can be so willfully arrogant

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indeed why can't our intelligence be so wilfully ignorant as our superstitions?
One reason is peer review. Scientists of all different faiths and beliefs madly check each others results looking for fault.
That is how we can be pretty sure of the timing and nature of the Big Bang,
virtually certain of the timing and nature Evolution.
And as sure that there is no need at any point for any supernatural being to enter the equation. Occam's Razor.

However, whatever works for you is essential, and please know that I admire and respect you at every level.

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I admire you also. Talking to you keep me on my toes thinking, learning and reasoning on interesting subjects that normally wouldn't cross my mind. If possible you'd have me doubting my belief if I didn't research the bible and sources for understanding. My atheist friend. But then I don't need to understand everything right away bc in due time things become clearer.

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Time itself is a most intriguing concept. We seldom think about it, let alone considering it a political issue. For a feminist perspective on time check out Jay Griffiths' "Pip Pip: A Sideways Look at Time", if you can fit it into your reading list, a fascinating and illuminating write.

Also congratulations on the huge success of "A Study In Pink". Great work on your part in that. I really don't know how you can do so much. Getting out of bed, washing and eating has been a successful day for me for a while now. I can see from re-reading my own comments that I'm getting better. Writing is painful and good for the soul, not that there is any such thing [grins].

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Thanks. I don't know either. Grins. I just do and worry about what I can't do later by that time I've figured out how to get it done.

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