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THE COMMON PURPOSE LULLABY
Oozing smooth through velvet pores
Seeping out from cupboard doors
This modern social Anti-Christ
This 'Common Purpose' poltergeist
Created in Nazi Germany
This enemy so hard to see
Your nosey neighbour now a spy
Don't let its danger pass you by
This bankers' human rights destroyer
Appealing to public paranoia
This people's cause so self-defined
To terrorise the human mind
This peer-led form of mind control
Lays bogus claims upon your soul
And to this beast of nowadays
My middle finger I shall raise
The scum behind this social plague
Should all be tried at The Hague
And if the courts are no solution
Then bullets can cure persecution!
copyright Phil Atherton 2014
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Wed, 2023-08-09 18:42
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Ruby Lord
Thu, 2023-08-10 06:52
OMG that was fantastic, great
OMG that was fantastic, great job, Ruby :)
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
The Poet In The Pub
Thu, 2023-08-10 14:28
thanks!
Won some kind of award for this one elsewhere. Nothing received to go next to the darts trophies though.
author commentRuby Lord
Mon, 2023-08-14 08:14
Congratulations on winning
Congratulations on winning the poem of the week contest. Well deserved. Ruby :)
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
The Poet In The Pub
Sun, 2023-08-20 04:42
delighted!
More to come, also will post some of my DVD.
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