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Summer Skin...
Summer dresses and flat shoes
Plunging bodices give great views
Hair unbound and flying free
That's what turns the head of me
T-shirts, shorts and bare thighs
Bring from me great heaving sighs
Been married tho, over twenty years
So I never get closer... get too near
I can't help it, I got to look
But wifey dear, only page in my book
I just look from back a ways
Summer skin makes for such pleasant days
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Structured: Western
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Geezer
Sun, 2011-07-03 18:08
Right Lonnie...
I guess that as long as we just look, we won't get in any trouble, so I'll keep changing my glasses as many times as I have to. LOL Thanks, ~ Gee
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Kailashana2
Sun, 2011-07-03 12:35
Baloney, no woman in her
Baloney, no woman in her right mind wears her hair down when it's hot.
;-)
~A
Geezer
Sun, 2011-07-03 18:13
Com'on...
Aren't you going to allow me some poetic license? I do see women who wear their hair down, and especially on the beach. It is a cheap way to bleach your hair out! Thanks anyway, ~ Gee
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Rhiannon1010
Tue, 2011-10-11 14:36
I DO!!! lol
not only does it bleach my hair, but i am blond so it is not so bad! lol
Geezer
Wed, 2011-10-12 19:03
Thanks...
for the read and comment. I know that when i go fishing or am out in the sun a lot, I like to let the sun bleach my hair too! I have blonde hair that is almost imperceptably going grey here and there, and it helps to hide that. LOL . Being an old hippie and a biker, I wear my hair long in a mullet. [What the hell has a mullet, got to do with long hair anyways?] ~ Thanks again, ~ Gee
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lou
Sun, 2011-07-03 13:17
Gee
You letcherous male you lol!! A simple but very effective poem.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Geezer
Sun, 2011-07-03 18:21
Yeah...
You got me. I started this poem about a week ago, and it was about one of the other taxi-drivers to start out, but I quickly realised that I shared his views. LOL After reading it to a couple of women, [including my wife], they said that contrary to popular belief, woman look at men other than their significant others too! I'm shocked! LOL. Thanks, ~ Gee
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Geezer
Mon, 2011-07-04 06:30
Thanks...
I'm careful to never read aloud! love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee
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Xavier Sleuth
Mon, 2021-08-09 20:21
Hmm, yep-
Maybe not get too close
But no harm in admiring
From afar.
Few repercussions that way, too.
Thx 4 sharing.
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Geezer
Tue, 2021-08-10 08:45
Right...
and I try not to be obvious about it, both with my wife and the women I watch! I don't want to be known as the old pervert down the street! ~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey
Tue, 2021-08-10 11:42
If you get time, and feel
If you get time, and feel inclined.
Look up the work of, Felix Dennis.
Love the humour in this.
Obi.